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Untitled (Work in Progress)

Far from the distant memory
of a long forgotten city
a wall of utter blackness
stretches before me

Alas my star,
My only source of light
Glimpsed from your
divine Acropolis retreasts.

To step out is
to be swept away forever

Author notes

This is just a little something that I typed up on my phone one night. Was out at the beach around midnight with Electric Sunrise and some friends and was inspired by the scene. Needs a lot of work at the moment.

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  • Kari gold member
    February 14, 2008

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    wow..I can relate to this piece actually in a lot of ways and see a lot of metaphors from it very well done, and good luck with finishing it


  • Suicidal Werewolf4U
    February 8, 2008
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    it hink that is really good... even if it is a work in progress... nice going