Sixteen weeks and not a thing,
you promised me you'd try to ring.
Not a sign of the written word,
not a thing have I heard.
It's tearing family's wide apart,
leaving many with broken hearts.
We are all pawns in a game,
neither side taking the blame.
Why can't people get it right,
just come together just unite.
Young lives cut short untold waste,
as war rages on in its haste.
Men are shouting out and calling,
as the bombs keep on falling.
Fathers worried mothers torn,
girlfriends and siblings all forlorn.
Terrible things run through my head,
as I fear your names on the list of dead.
Will we ever see blissful peace?
Will this violent war ever cease?
Stomach knots and tears fall,
as I hope you'll get chance to call.
Even just a scribbled note,
would fill me up with so much hope.
For now nothing more can I do,
except write daily my love for you.
And pray we will have a life,
that one day soon, I'll be your wife.
Author notes
The fear and sadness whilst waiting for a loved one to return is unmeasurable. I hope with this piece I have managed to relay some of the helplessness the ones left behind feel. It is an incredibly sad time for all and I hope everyone is reunited with their loved ones soon.
A contest entry
- Goodbye soldier! by Procrastination.
400 points, ended September 4, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Kissing The War Goodbye by Dead Star--x.
600 points, ended February 2, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i reaaly like this. getting letters or calls are hard to get and if you do youre lucky. my friend explained this to me and its saddens me because you wont know if they made it or how there day went what theyve experienced how they feel anything
however when they get the oppurtunity (so he tells me) he will write i just hope he gets the oppurtunity and till then ill stay glued to the news and sleepless nights
thanx for entering♥
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Congrats on your trophy!!!This is a hell of a tribute to the soldier and his family. Wonderful Post.
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wonderfully done!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
waiting for someone you love to return is agonizing..... and the days just seem to drag along as you wait from day to day... but when they return to you......its so exciting and so very special!!!!!!!
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Thank You SOOOOOOOOOOOO much for entering this wonderful & beautiful piece into My contest!!!!!!!!!!!!
best wishes...... and much MUCH love !!!!!!!!!
good luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
EXcellent DEEP Poetry!!
Good natural flow of words! Exceptional writing.
Good rhyme also!
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Wow... This is so sweet, and loving and caring.
Your rhyming pattern is really good. This poem brought tears to my eyes.
Thankyou for entering the contest.
Much love,
Emily x
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