I sit on the swing
And watch everyone else play
As I wait for the bell to ring
So I bow my head and pray
For a Best friend
Whom I tell my secrets to
On a friend who I can depend
To stay with me through and through
Amen as I look up I see a girl in front of me
She looks into my green eyes and says hi
I know god has answered my plea
As I run off to play I said thank you to the sky
Author notes
I never had a best friend during elementary school dont even have one going into jr. high so i thought i would write about a girl who has no friends but ends up finding one
also im 12
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cool
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i guess poetry is kind of like my best friend since im not good at writing stories i write poetry i have never kept a journal and i cant start because i dont like writing journals as much as poetry but one day my dad told me i shoulkd write a book about all the things ive been through and i kept thinking of that to myself (this is be4 my dad started drinking) and I guess it felt kind of good to instead write my feeling in poetry
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I remember those days. Jr. High was not fun. I hope you find your best friend. I found poetry in the 7th grade. That's was who I told all my secrets too. Jr. high was pretty rough for my kids too. It does get better, hang in there.
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Beautiful and true, a wonderfully crafted piece. Lol. Ps. I'm also twelve.
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hmm... it reminds me of myself when i was in elementary... although i really didnt have any friends in school... its good to have a friend you can trust in and im glad i have one now...
~Nick
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Best friends are awesome to have. Life is just not quite the same once they go away, so I hope yours stays forever
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sort of shortened the last line
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yeah i couldnt really think of a good last line
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I'm reminded of when I moved and started at a new school in the fifth grade. It was a small town where everyone already knew each and were content, until one kid decided to befriend me. Excellent poem.
I'm a stickler for punctuation though, and I think it helps the reader a lot when it's used. I also think the last line could be changed. I'm not sure to what though. All the other lines are short, which to me makes the last one seem to be crammed a tiny bit.
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good job
Honest and expressive. I like this a lot.
Brian
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