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Freedom

In the night
a velvet sky
stretches across
an endless existance.
and the wind whispers joy.

a blur of white
streaks scross
the sea of soft
green grass
swaying gently
in the breeze.
and the wind wispers life.

the horse and rider
race along
the edge of the universe.
not a worry
nor a care.
and the wind whispers freedom

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  • VampireBrat
    June 26
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    why this is beutiful

  • Roibyn
    June 18
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    its an adventure that i would wat to take haha i like it

  • xXAlone insideXx
    May 29
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    It's deep and really good

  • Skyie
    April 13
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    beautiful imagery!
    this poem does just whisper freedom....
    love it! nice one! xx
  • wandering-pen
    March 7
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    Wow amazing imagery. I could really use a long vacation there. haha


  • LoveIsALosingGame
    March 6

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    great job

    This a very intense piece with great flow and emotion. I found it almost spiritual! just one thing I think "wind wispers" is a mistake, "whispers", unless you wanted it that way. But anyway an excellent piece!

    Claire.

    • BrokenWings...Fly
      March 6
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      oh! thanks for telling me.. it is a spelling error! and thank you so much for the comment.. i'll be sure to returnt he favor soon!

  • Walls-within
    February 14

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    I do like the way the place is described, you can really paint a picture within your mind. Great Job on this one too.


  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    January 30

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    Can you give me directions to this place, please? I'd like to go. Great writing and imagery.

    Mark

  • brotherwithin
    January 27
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    Great poem! specifically the last stanza! ^.^!

  • XNightmare-AngelX
    January 17
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    This is amazing
    Awesomeness
    Its flows so well
    well done
    xxxx

  • Lost Emo gold member
    January 16
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    awesome poem. I really like the flow and the use of great imagery. keep up the gd writes


  • sidewinder silver member
    December 17, 2007

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    you might look at that last stanza and do a spellcheck on it.


    and as I see this nature finds it's smile that brings joy into one's heart and soul!


    Wee said my friend!
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill


  • XxMandyxGirlxX
    December 7, 2007

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    dude....u need to fix scross...i already told u idk what it means....im gonna keep bugging u until u fux it....its in the 2nd stanze 2nd line....FIX IT!!! lol
    i luv yoo!!!

    ~mandy

  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    September 19, 2007

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    This is a very inspring and vivid piece. You put your words together very nicely and the flow was great. I like how you repeated "and the wind whispers...", I think it fit very nicely.
    Great work
    Jeanette*~

  • XxMandyxGirlxX
    September 9, 2007
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    ok dude...u spelt across wrong u put scross...i dont know what that means...and you spelt whispers wrong u put wispers..lol..use spell check next stupid..lol..luvs yoos!!!

    ~mandy

  • tawk gold member
    August 15, 2007

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    This reminder me of the movie Ghost Rider. What wonderful imagery and emotions throughout!! So beautiful and peaceful too. Wonderful write my dear sweet niece

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