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Goodbye

 

 

Through the deep torn rumble of fallen fear

stands someone’s young child of fragile heart.

With empty promises and broken dreams

their blood flows cold across shard glass.

Y

The record plays tunes of a comatose horror

that melts the ice slowly through their veins.

Silence seldom helps this savage pain I endure

and prison wouldn't have been my sanctuary.

Y

Now it's too late to weave a beam of hope

within this dark garden they call "Death"

Maybe beyond the horizon there is a place

that will allow me to find peace and happiness.

 

 G

     O

    O

D

B   

    Y    

   E

 Y

 

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AP name: Getsbetter

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  • Xombii
    October 9, 2008

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    Beautifully penned, to say the least.

    I love the flow of this poem, the way it rolls off the tongue and is such an easy read that the impact doesn't fully hit until the end of the poem.

    Thank you so much for entering dear.


  • Whoochi gold member
    August 17, 2007

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    EWWW...very good, great use of the word bank and pic...saddening....and pulls at my heart!!! Best of luck!