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A New Autumn Day

to be read to the melody of In Autumn by Random Goldfish 

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(piano) 0:03

Nights change into autumn

like her pale countenance, cold;

as death appears-

seizing her hand from mine…

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(interlude) 

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(harp) 0:18

Autumn leaves spiral down, 

too early in the season,

time stands still,

mysteries

ring in the bell tower…  

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(cello) 0:30

Had I been immortal

perhaps I could have saved her;

tragedy follows me-

dark, like a raven…

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(harp) 0:42

“Don’t blame thyself,

sorrowful one;

time tolls for us all, here;    

she... is at peace now,

soon, we will all be…”

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(cello) 0:54

Autumn winds whispering

from the dim shadow,

telling me that she waits

out in deep meadow …

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(strings) 1:06

Autumn years, cast among clouds  

stay with me, to pray,

waiting for

the day when we’re together…

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(harp) 1:18

Time turning my heart to leaves,

dry, crumbling,

as they will

when trod by loneliness,

passing slow

toward the winter fields…

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(cello) 1:30

...that’s when I hear her

call…

calling from the dreams

I’ve been imprisoned in…

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(cello) 1:42

Autumn days

return… as I rain,

forever lost within

long remembered autumn days…   

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(harp) 1:54

Autumn waves, chilling winds

carry back our memories

that we had shared 

in days

when the leaves fell…

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(cello) 2:06

(interlude: the memories…)

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(harp) 2:30

(interlude: the dreams…)

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(piano) 2:42

Days fade into autumn,

hearts find a new spring rain;   

hands touch in the moonlight,

dreams are forever sealed...

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(piano) 2:57

New hands found;

dreams are sealed;

a new

autumn day begins.    

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Author notes



 

Poems/Scores to the Music of Random Goldfish:
(in reverse chronological order)

Thinking of August- Now or Never http://allpoetry.com/poem/5893739

Thinking of August- Duo (piano and cello) http://allpoetry.com/poem/5660705

Thinking of August- Acoustic Grand Piano http://allpoetry.com/poem/5892115

Thinking of August- Electric http://allpoetry.com/poem/5435359

Sweet August Days to Come http://allpoetry.com/poem/5423787

Sometimes... Faces http://allpoetry.com/poem/4940637

The Moon Tonight- Christmas from Ireland http://allpoetry.com/poem/4895079

Then the Merry Fiddlers Came http://allpoetry.com/poem/4885481

'Round a Grand Carousel http://allpoetry.com/poem/4778751

Two Souls Rooted Deep Within http://allpoetry.com/poem/4776245

A Dream- Where the Water Sleeps http://allpoetry.com/poem/4756347

Lune Sings http://allpoetry.com/poem/4397931

Gas Pump Music Duel http://allpoetry.com/poem/3449548

Chained in Silver http://allpoetry.com/poem/3385242

A New Autumn Day http://allpoetry.com/poem/3308104

Merry Merry Wiccan Wiccan Friends http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3293000

In this Wilderness a Love of Old http://allpoetry.com/poem/3244044

The Sable http://allpoetry.com/poem/3239364

Donkey Feathers http://allpoetry.com/poem/3238828

The Obsidian Tree http://allpoetry.com/poem/3059430

The Forest Altar http://allpoetry.com/poem/2648314

The Snowy Banks http://allpoetry.com/poem/2646132

 

(some scores modified by me)

 

 

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  • Random Goldfish gold member
    August 15, 2007

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    Hmm...interesting changes to my score...

    In the interlude section...I don't think the piece's chord changes were used to their best ability...I opened those chords to really be free and pretty so the instrument (mainly the cello) can just climb and become so melodic and beautiful that someone might stop breathing...the cello solo was rather...blah to me...the rhythm could have been much more invovled and the lines could have climbed more to build into that high note.

    But as always the poetry was great...a few areas I lost my place at though...probably because I'm so zoned in the score changes...


    • wbiro gold member
      August 15, 2007
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      lol at 'blah'!... Maybe you're right, but I'll have to listen to it a hundred times until I see the blah... and I'll try to see what you mean about the chords... I do keep in mind 'new' listeners- I found that we become jaded, and what has become boring to us still fascinates a newbie... (note my mod is only at 3, Obsidian is at 66!) I don't foresee too many changes however- and only with my mods- your score is quite full already... With this piece I tried something new- bending the melody to the words where convenient, which caused the melody to be a bit choppy in some places, I later noticed... so I haven't put away my chisel and hammer just yet... (and the words aren't completely refined yet, either) but hey- now you have two versions of your score floating around here now!