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A breath it takes, a whisper

A breath it takes, a whisper
To launch this thought
Floating endlessly through the sunstreaked sky

A breath it takes, a whisper
To see your face
Shadowed by the crimson clouds

A breath it takes, a whisper
To hear your voice
Echoing on the westerly winds

A breath it takes, a whisper
To smell your fragrance
Drifting across the sun glazed treetops

A breath it takes, a whisper
To taste your lips
Lit by the rising moon

A breath it takes, a whisper
To feel your memory
Brushed with the star filled sky

A breath it took a thought, the thought of you.
It whispered across the sky.
Tracing your footsteps. Leaving your memory.
So this thought shall always remain.

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  • BluRobyn
    October 25, 2007

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    I like this. The imagery and description is great. I like the repition, the way you used ' a breath it takes, a whisper' and the ending. It flows really well. Well done!