No more fear, no more pain,
never again will I take the blame.
Your anger was a force to behold,
a way to get me to do as I'm told.
Cuts and bruises are all healed,
but deeper wounds will never yield.
A single tear escapes my eye,
when I think how easy I could have died.
Children damaged beyond repair,
all because you were there.
As I lay upon my bed,
notions drifting within my head.
through the window I see the trees,
Gently swaying in the breeze.
clouds are scattered throughout the sky,
like broken promises drifting by.
I close my eyes and think of you,
all the things you said you'd do.
To you I had no reason to exist,
except as a punch bag for your fist.
Raining blows everyday,
I used to think was the normal way.
Until I finally I saw the light,
and realized this wasn't right.
True love is all about care,
to listen, laugh and share.
But since I've gone, walked out the door,
my love for you is no more.
I'd felt the pain for oh so long,
but now I'm back and twice as strong.
Who knew it lay beneath the skin,
the ultimate strength I had from within.
Author notes
My very 1st attempt at poetry.
Not a fictional write. I wrote this in the hope of inspiring others who may be trapped, there is life after abuse.
A contest entry
- - Backgrounds / Childhood- by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended September 11, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - heartbreaker by ExpectingMommy18.
550 points, ended September 22, 2007, 34 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Been in an abusive relationship? Divorced? How does it feel to you to go through these things? by Beautiful-N-Broken.
450 points, ended October 26, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - EDIT: ADDING POINTS! Come Be A Voice...Hearts Loving and True, Sincere...Lets Speak Out On Abuse..And start DOING instead of just watching... by PassionsPromise.
2500 points, ended December 10, 2007, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie by Dirty and Broken.
600 points, ended December 15, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Blood Stained Wedding Ring by Sorath.
850 points, ended February 9, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - laura's 50th-gold-trophy celebration by Immortal Obscurity.
400 points, ended July 4, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I can certainly see
why this poem has so many trophies, it is just excellent. So sorry you had to endure such things but your intentions to help others who may be in a similar situation speaks of your character and strength, good write.
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The first poem always comes from the heart.
And this poem is truly full of real emotions.
I really feel the strength of a poem comes from what the writer feels not what he makes people believe.
To uncover the poet look for his first poems.
Lol
You are a born poet.
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Wow this is so unbelievably sad!! So sorry hunny.. you've been through so much!! But look at the powerful ending and the strength you have gained... and what a wonderful person you are today.
This is simply amazing!!
Your ver first poem and look how many trophies it's won!!! Freaking hell!!!
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Excellent
WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh my goodness.
I am so very sorry this ever happened to you.
I hope you are ok.
Thankfully you got out of it, when you did.
Perfectly penned piece of poetry.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing.
*S* Cynthia
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WOW! I absolutely love this poem! It's full of pain, anger, sadness and feelings. It simply took my breath away. No doubt why you have so many trophies. Great job!
Keep writing
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Very impressive, I can see why you have collected so many trophies. Thanks for the entry!
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noticed your authors notes, and even before that, i was wondering if this was a true happening...extreme emotion, great flow as always, and nothing short of ripping out the heart of anyone who has been where you were...
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congrats on the gold for this and for calling attention to abuse. this is well written. Thank you for sharing with the group.
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I am glad you got out of it before you became another statistic on a sheet of paper somewhere, so many do not make it out. Excellent write, thank you so much for entering it. Please put in your authors notes if Tory can use this in her book...Scott & Tory
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Amazing. I loved it and fits the entire prompt I love it . Great job. Thanx for entering and good luck. Keep writing.
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Amazing. I loved it and fits the entire prompt I love it . Great job. Thanx for entering and good luck. Keep writing.
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Very well written, I know what it's like and in many ways this poem is similar to my first poem, it's on here and if you have the time, check it out it's called 'Before' Thank you for entering and best of luck. Well done for getting out and keep strong. xXx
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Wonderfully written, an excellent message of truth and strength to get clear of the Abuse of all types. I am an Alcoholic, I know how hard it is to break free of that particular situation. Although never molested or beaten, I stand strongly at my love Tory's side and voice my opinion on it as well. Best of luck to you...Scott
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Now I see why you are so understanding This is so powerful to me. Now I will truly take heed to your words. You have been on both sides. Keep writing Lady D.
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it takes a lot of courage and inner strength to overcome the scars of abuse. I think you've won the battle
Joe
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This is exactly what i was hoping for when I started this contest. You touched on every aspect from fear to being used to leaving and becoming stronger.
This amazed me. Thanks so much for being a supportive voice. I commend you.
Tory
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I'd felt the pain for oh so long,
but now I'm back and twice as strong.
Who knew it lay beneath the skin,
the ultimate strength I had from within.
Your words are very strong. I especially liked the last verse. Good luck in the contest!
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This is such a deeply touching write, it's not depressive or over dramatised, but strong, and real.
It's also really well written - so no criticism on that front either.
=> Jess
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'Simply The Best'
You have brought out the positive side of a negative situation with a style and a class belonging only to you. I understand that you are thirsty to drink in principles and rudiments of poetry. I only hope that you will always be Pinktat.
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Masterfully Portrayed
This is so good-full of feeling, pain, turning and triumph! You express it all so well, I am sorry that you suffered so, but Glad that finally you are the Better for it, instead of the Battered & beaten.
God Bless You, Keep on writing from the heart!
David aka MassMan
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DAMN GOOD FOR YOU! I AM SO GLAD TO HEAR THAT! i love the way you put so much thought in this beautiful poem great job!!
good luck and the best wishes
bailey -
wow this is an amazing, so painful and straight from the heart.very proud of you for having the courage to get out of the relationship and for telling your story, your words may give others the inspiration to break free too.
Thankyou for enteringand goodluck -
A very powerful piece.Thanks for sharing
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this was amazing and you did a wonderful job of writing it...im glad you got out of that relationship i know how you feel...it always hurts to lose the one you love even when you know its best...thank you for entering and good luck!!
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Hey! Good first write! Simple(not so short) but it gets the message of abuse across. I was just wondering if the line "children damaged beyon repair" is used here literally or something metaphorical. Are you married/unmarried with kids?
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this is a great write. sad but good.
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I could have sworn I commented on this...
I love the feeling of empowerment emanating from this piece.
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Wow this is a very emotional write. wow congrats on finally seeing the light and getting out of the bad situation that you were in. Very nice. Thank you for entering. I wish you the best of luck in my contest and in everything you do in life.
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wow
This is a very good write expecially for it to be your first one too...nice.....
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Nobody deserves to be treated like this by anyone. I'm sorry that this treatment was administered to you. It wasn't fair and it wasn't right and you're right, children shouldn't ahve to go through this, not anyone. I'm glad you could express your feelings though, that always helps I found. Well done on your first poem (here or ever?).
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This is good.
through the window I see the trees
gently swaying in the breeze
clouds are scattered throughout the sky
like broken promises drifting by
I close my eyes and think of you
all the things you said you'd do
but since I've gone
walked out the door
my love for you is no more
I'd felt the pain for oh so long
but now I'm back and twice as strong
Thanks for sharing goodluck in the contest.
Best Wishes
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OMG!!! AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Your line, "I'd felt the pain for oh so long
but now I'm back and twice as strong." is so, so true! I admire you for your strength and courage.
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