Selfish
So many times I've drawn the curtains
Seeing only me
Absorbed in my feelings
And thoughts of nothing else
Human yes
But at times obsessed
With the belief in my own importance
Not being sanctimonious
But yet a common man
I join the ranks of the connivers
But the cripple
Who wishes to take the first step
The beggar in rags and hungry
The child alone
Do I see them
Or do I draw the curtains
Ask god why
Death, sickness and war
But should I
For am I not part of all who we are
So just once
It is time to look past myself
Draw back the curtains
And dare to understand
That life is much more then just I
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- I'm alone......are you? by movedon.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 103 entries
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Deep
My dear, you have captivated me with your thirty-five lines...if only more ppl would take the time to take a step back, remove themselves from there own situations and drama, and take a look at what is going on in the world around them. I believe we would all have a better understanding of this world we live in, not to mention a better understanding of self. Even if we do it just once. Wonderful job here, Bob.-Monica
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Ty Monica
But do I practice what I preach? Not always
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good write...sometimes we forget others exist when we choose to be alone...I try to remember a smile to someone is all they need if they are lonely...D
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ty So much
It is tough out there & we does sometimes think we are the only one that matters
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Thoughtful Poem
Good morning Bob, Sometimes we get so wrapped up in our own emotions we don't see the big picture going on all around us. It does not mean we are selfish. We are only human. But in the end we usually manage to see the error of our ways. Great write my friend. It is good to look at oneself and want to do better. Something I struggle with too. You take care my friend, Sandy
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oh Bob
this is so good, life is more than what each of us is,but we are human,learn and live from what we have
and thank God we have our sanity, good job on this,PM
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ty so much
I always appreciate your kind comments
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Such powerful words "So just once
It is time to look past myself
Draw back the curtains
And dare to understand
That life is much more then just I" Wow this is an amazing write. So full of wonderful imagery and emotions.
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well
At times perhaps I get on my soap box. But hey my mind just has things to say. thanks my friend
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We Are All Just Human................
Bob!!! And I think at times we have all failed to show compassion to someone else's hurt. Drawing close the curtains, as you say. Don't be harder on yourself than you have to be as I'm sure that in just the fact that you wrote this means that you have drawn the curtains open in order to see what is really out there, therefore showing yu care about this hurting world. That is the first step in changing it. Thanks for writing this poem as it causes me to once again look away from mylsef and onto the hurt of others!!!~~Toni~~
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Thanks Toni
I need to take a long look. But I must
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Just being human my friend...So just once It is time to look past myself Draw back the curtains And dare to understand...Very good and filled with emotions Thank you for sharing
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Thanks Ann
I guess being human has it's ups and downs -
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BobFox
yes it does...more downs than ups
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Compelling write!
"Human yes
But at times obsessed
With the belief in my own importance
Not being sanctimonious
But yet a common man
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It is time to look past myself
Draw back the curtains
And dare to understand
That life is much more then just I"
We all need to stop and take a look "inside" every now and then at how big the world really is ... and our part in it. As humans, our vision narrows at times, becoming self-absorbed. But as aware beings, we can choose to expand our vision past our own needs/wants and ask ourselves ... what can I do to help others in need? We really do have the power to "draw back the curtains."
Excellent job Bob. Your words have touched a lot of hearts. Thank you friend.
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Thank you
Just some thoughts in a world of materialistic values
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Amazing that you should write this today almost at the same time I wrote my poem based on the quote:
"A person is a person through other persons; you can't be human in isolation; you are human only in relationships." (Desmond Tutu)
Well done my friend!
Love,
Amera ♥
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Living in a house with 2 teenagers that feel the world is just about them causes me to think, "What about me?" too. Filling the wants of others can be time consuming and sometimes they are never satisfied. But, beyond that. I feel the "me" part of us is only natural and that it is good to try to be more giving and loving towards others. There is a deep satisfaction in giving when others need it more than I.
Your poem expresses what all of us feel at times, these are good points to ponder and consider making us better individuals. WE are never truly finished growing or making ourself a better person until the final end.
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thank you so
At times I fearI have failed as a human being. But we all are just being human
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This made me think of someone with OCD.
It was the first part that did it.
Opening and closing of curtains.
Keep up this work.
I like the way it reads.
Well done.
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I sometimes think like that..
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Yes, Bob, deep and real - a lesson for all of us who "pass on the other side..." One point: I think that "the" for "their" in the third verse might be better? Warm thoughts from,
Donald
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Thank you
Thanks for the kind comment. I know my writes on here are not received well by most poets. But the again I am just who I am & I will look into your suggestion . Again ty
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who we are...
This is very deep and shows great insight into the "human condition" my friend! Most people think that the world revolves around them alone. When they realise that is not the case they are shocked!
Well done!
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so True
I myself stay locked up in my own little world at times. But I must be a realist as well Thanks again for your kind comment
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Hey, sod being attractive, it's nice to find someone who has the balls to write about feelings and display for the whole world to see.
A very interesting write that maybe everyone should read.
Thanks for sharing
Sue
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Good write Bob! And so timely....We get so self absorbed....All wound up with our life...What do we inject into society and their needs....Alot of us need a reality check, and take action...Timely and powerful!
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As always
thank you for the kind comment. But there I go again . writing on a subject that is not attractive to so many on AP lol
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