If you could be the one
to chase the stars from my eyes,
i would gladly smile for the gray mornings
of this hollow wreck...
If you could be the one
to push the dreams that crowd my head
i would drown less and less.
For all this time,
i have longed for
some way to peel back the skin
and truly make the world fit -
it is forever uneasy - a room full of strangers :
if i could trade all their smiles
for just one
i would give it all
to be the one
beside you.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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It is amazing amazing and amazing
such a melodious smooth and wonderfully beautiful desire and wish, so wonderfully written and love emanating from those words.
Oh if I could say the same clearly to some of my beloved and if they could understand!
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There is so very much wanton desire, and passion written into this passage. I do wonder if the person for whom this is intended read this, what their response would be. I cannot see how anyone would be able to turn away. Exquisite emotions, chalked throughout this poem.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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this is an aching but yummy sigh of a poem. sensationally lovely.
are you not writing much these days? this one is almost two years old.
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Clean, clear style, good rhythm and timing in the exposition. Disorder of the world, healing power in the communion of a real meeting.
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