It’s hard to know the day it happened
when autumn danced upon the scene
Subtle changes to the landscape
showed summertime had lost its sheen
From topmost branches cheeky squirrels
ceased their chatter and their play
In earnest hunted fallen acorns
knowing winter soon held sway
Songbirds too had fallen silent
their offspring from the garden fled
Vacating clouds began returning
to jar and jostle overhead
Round flowerbeds the bees were racing
gathering their final feed
Butterflies’ were in a dither
a winters bed was their main need
The summer breeze was getting anxious
as rising winds dashed here and there
Buffeting the golden corn fields
showing that it didn’t care
Summertime was slowly dying
autumn claiming its domain
I watch a single tear from heaven
glide across my window pane
Yet, beauty came with its departing
nature added colours new
As if to say I have a palette
mixed in shade to dazzle you
So do not weep when summers over
enjoy the pleasure of this day
Remember it is but a short while
wintertime is on its way
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Author notes
If you comment and know me please do not use my name So to keep the contest anonymous Thank you
In a list
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A contest entry
- Autumn Rhyme by piccola.
700 points, ended August 15, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I love Autumn and I am giving many points to the one who will make me love it even more. by Loveandblessings2u.
700 points, ended September 12, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Congratulations on the gold! Nicely writ!
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Hi, congratulations on the gold, a lovely poem, kind regards Di
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Hi Di thank you so much for your kind words So many fine poems could so easily have been selected so it was an honour
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Oh, My I am love this.
" Yet, beauty came with its departing
nature added colours new
As if to say I have a palette
mixed in shade to dazzle you "
I love that part so much, getting
ready for autumn is always fun
Great job...
good luck in the contest.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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So beautiful, soft rhyme and flow and so easy to understand, my kind of poetry, well done
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wow
no wonder you won gold..man this just blows me away..I always enjoy season and nature poems..this is among the best..my friend..your flow and imagery are amazing as always..it is like your writes play with the reader for awhile then go in for the "kill" an awesome ending..as always..
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I came by to read some of your other work, and, mainly to thank you for posting your poem in my contest, Breast Cancer Awareness, I truly do appreciate it. I wanted to let you know how much it means to me, personally, for you to have entered my contest, and to make that statement away from the contest. I will be leaving an impartial, brief, comment there on that poem, but it will be only a boilerplate remark. I will try to leave something more considered later. So anyway I went looking for another poem of yours, a bit daunting, so many impressive poems. But here I am at this poem, " Autumn Danced" The title got me right off, I love autumn…expected a good poem but I must say, this is far from good.
Superlatives get in the way of what I would say of this, Great, Outstanding, maybe even Wonderful…all those fit but not quite. What I eagerly want to convey but fail so miserably is that the life within the poem speaks louder than the images you’ve created. As if fall opened herself just for the reader to embrace. The lovely assonance carried in ‘cheeky squirrels ceased their chatter’ is a joy. I never read poems silently anymore and when I read this “out loud” the first time, I could not stop smiling for the sheer joy of its sound. I know I ramble on but you are a fine, find writer, so many others have told you that, I just thot I’d add to the chorus.
Blessings and best wishes,
~richard
the gold trophy wasnt bad either.
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The content here is fantastic I particularly love the metaphor of tear from heaven. Love it.
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Wonderful
It is right that gold adorns this wonderful Autumn Rhyme. Always impeccable in form and image. My friend, Bravo!
~Pamela
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Well my friend, I can see why this won the Gold. It is so beautiful. Your imagery was like walking through the hillside with the sound of music. Corny but true.
This is my very very best favorite season coming up. And with my youngest son getting married in 10 days I am looking forward to the change of season. How are you. I hope all is well with your sweet grandson. I don't stop by to say hello often enough
Sorry. Well you take care and enjoy the rest of your evening. I so enjoyed your poem. A delight to read. I am glad I didn't miss it. Bless you and take care, Sandy 
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GREAT!
when I read this poem i imagined the sharp, chilly, autumn breeze I love! Awesome write! -
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Thank you so much fallenangel for taking time to read and comment on this poem.It is always pleasing to have the reactions to ones work from fellow poets So i really do appreciate it Thank you
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Awesome
I can very well say, this is a winner piece. I felt as if I just had a stroll in one of the faroff gardens legend.. This piece is just soo delicate. Its been a while, since I read some solid pieces of yours (they have just been humorous ones oflate. i guess).. and this one, is definitely marvellous and I enjoyed from the first to the last line. Certain usage of words u have here, I like them and leaves me wanting to read for the second time
Well Done Legend..
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Thank you raspberry you know me a humour if it can be incorporated into my work i will. Even if the subject matter is serious. Cant help myself . Although i can be serious at times. Thank you for such wonderful words
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Brrrrrrr .....I've got a feeling autumn will be missed out this year and jump straight to winter if this summer is anything to go on lol. As always you have presented us with another work of art....I truly love the nature poems, and this is absolutely gorgeous from start to finish. Congratulations on the gold trophy and so very well deserved....a really beautiful winner!
Well done dear Legend.
Shaz xx
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You may well be right Shaz i think summer only had a fortnight vacation in our side of the globe.Sad now that we have to wait for spring to see the suns smiling face
So pleased you enjoyed the read Thank you
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I would not expect...
...any thing less. Such quality, I've stopped being amazed at your works, I'm sorry, I just take it for granted! Stunner!! WASP.
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Thank you my friend for such wonderful words They really do mean a lot to me.Thank you for reading and commenting
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Wonderful
I shall see the beautiful autumn colours for myself very soon and so looking forward to it. thank you for giving me an early preview of what to expect. I wait with baited breath!
Von
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I too Von will soon be bathing in the beauty of autumn, that is not to say that we have had any summer here this year.I guess i will just have to make do with the little bit of sun we have had
Thank you for your always welcome comments
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This is such a beautiful and soft read. From start to end I felt like I was flowing with those lines. I will be the first one to buy your book of poetries when you publish them..its just a joy to read your writes. Congratulations on winning the gold trophy..take care.
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Thank you meena krish You always have such wonderful things to say about my work.As for my book you may have a long long wait,I have never had an interest in having my work published,It has always been just a hobby for me.The remarks i get from this site are more than enough reward
But I appreciate your comment Thank you
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Well-deserved Gold!
Summertime was slowly dying
autumn claiming its domain
I watch a single tear from heaven
glide across my window pane
Yet, beauty came with its departing
nature added colours new
As if to say I have a palette
mixed in shade to dazzle you
These are my absolute favorite two stanzas in this amazingly written masterpiece. I look forward to fall all year and feel as though I just tolerate the other seasons... this gave me hope for the autumn return is not far away! Beautifully done!
I was dazzled indeed. Love and Luck in all you endeavor...
Congratulations on the gold!
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thank you Nicole I have to say that i am quite pleased at the way this one turn out I had only a couple of hours before the contest closed.I usually like to write a piece and leave it a few days then check it a couple of time to see if it needs editing Perhaps i care to much , and should just go for it. Thank you for your comments they are appreciated
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Autum just so happens to be my favorite time of year. In contrast to Springs bright and cheerful colors, amazing as well, yes, but Autum has such deep, rich colors that just seem to "set well" with my eyes and heart in such a way as to make me feel a little more grounded if you will. I love this peice, truly, truly love it!
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Thank you uchideshi, there seem to be few people that autumn does not effet in a possitive way.It could be the beautiful colours that nature splashes around as if to say These are just to keep your memories warm though winter
Thank you for your comments
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oh this was breath taking
iam so in love with this poem.
a wonderful scene of beauty is all that i seen as i read this
thank you
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Thank you so muuch Raggyann for taking time to read and comment. It is always a joy to know that ones work has been good enough for the reader to take time to comment thank you
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On your page autumn rhyme with the all perfection of nature poetry. This kind of poetry easy could be published in the school books to teach kids how to cherish the nature beauty. Perfect!
~Sonja~
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Thank you Sonja I have said in an earlier comment How could one not be inspired to write about such a beautiful time of the year. So much is happening along with so many changes Thank you for taking time to read and comment
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Really a fabulous poem that was very well-crafted and full of wonderful imagery. Best of luck in the contest.
David Michaels
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Thank you so much David for a lovely comment. It is nice to know what a fellow poet thinks of ones work Thank you once again
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The title drew me in and the poem certainly did not dissappoint
Ruth
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Dear Ruth you and i both know that sometimes a title can make all the difference as to whether a person reads or not
I always try to find an enticing one. So pleased that you enjoyed the read Thank you
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Wonderful
Very well written , the imagery and feeling in this poem is wonderful. Being a lover of spring and autumn I find myself feeding off every word here.. A russet treasure to keep in store...Good luck with this excellent piece...mal
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Mal my dearest friend you know as well as i the joys that autumn brings to our neck of the woods Who could not be inspired by it Thank you so much for taking time to read and comments Take care
Legend
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Marvellous!!! Your poetry has beautiful imagery and this was just an autumn delight! fantastic as usual!
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Thank you Kiran I have no need to tell you how much your comment mean.I have said it a number of times I rate your words with the highest esteem Thank you
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WOW
I know that you are one of the most talented persons whose work I have read, yet you still amaze me everytime with your words. This is a perfect example of your genius and I only wish that I too could find such descriptive wording in my head. Good luck with the competition!
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Dear Athena I have told you before never doubt your own ability to write some wonderful work.I have read some so you know that i know just what talent you have That you always give me such wonderful comments is never taken for granted Thank you
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"From topmost branches cheeky squirrels
ceased their chatter and their play
In earnest hunted fallen acorns
knowing winter soon held sway"
"
Round flowerbeds the bees were racing
gathering their final feed
Butterflies’ were in a dither
a winters bed was their main need
The summer breeze was getting anxious
as rising winds dashed here and there
Buffeting the golden corn fields
showing that it didn’t care
Summertime was slowly dying
autumn claiming its domain
I watch a single tear from heaven
glide across my window pane
Yet, beauty came with its departing
nature added colours new
As if to say I have a palette
mixed in shade to dazzle you
So do not weep when summers over
enjoy the pleasure of this day
Remember it is but a short while
wintertime is on its way"
haha...I started wanting to quote my favorite stanzas...and that ended up being mostly the whole of the poem. I love this! It's colorful, beautiful, flows well, rhymes well...absolutely perfect!
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LOVE IT. such an excellent write. You new people on AP certainly can bring fresh talent into the fold. LOL
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Thank you Elizabeth For such comments You already know my thoughts on your posting.That you enjoyed this one really is pleasing,to know that poets such as yourself enjoy what i have penned. Thank you
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Thank you Jan I guess us newbies are learning from the wonderful poets parading their talents here. Thank you for your welcome Hee He
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Oh my..I am in tears...This touched me so...ONe of my favorites from you....ANother one to bookmark so that I will never lose it...
You are so amazing...Have I told you that before?
Lynda
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Thank you Lynda your always supportive comments are a joy to this poets eyes,Thank you for always being there
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