the curtain of my face;
how thin the light
passes through it
but you moved me
in the diurnal motion
of flowers
a pollination
of stem and stone
my body bends
to your body
catching the sun
Author notes
Sunflowers are heliotropic: Heliotropism is the diurnal (daytime) motion of flowers in response to the direction of the sun...and I believe they get their color, at least partly from pollination.
Graphic borrowed from ArdentMarch
In a list
A contest entry
- Sunflower by tara wilson.
2800 points, ended August 26, 2007, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Mania for MY FAVORITES!!!!!!!!! by Celticmoon.
700 points, ended November 2, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The sunflower speaks truth here! Well-done!
Peace Love & Light,
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Robin,
The elegance of this piece radiates with a sensual light that quenches the thirst of the pallet with a delicate rain that is just enough. This is an amazing penning and exact proof why I both brought you into the Sensual Quills as well as added you to my favorites. Stunning poetry! Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessings
Bel
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Combined with your scientific knowledge and masterful strokes of a quill, you wove a truly captivating write. Congrats on your GOLD! I must read more of your works; this poem is truly phenomenal. My best, Belle
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I think if I had read this
sooner...I would have abandoned any thoughts of writing a poem for this contest....simply beautiful this is...well worth the weight of gold....congratulations poet
Mal
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Thank you
I'm glad you did enter. Yours was beautiful as well.
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Well, well, well...Looks like it was "enough" of a poem to garner the gold, ehhh, Robin??? 
Congrats, Sweetie. 
Wanda
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LOL, thanks Wanda. Don't you love it when that happens?
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Yep. I surely do. And it usually does, too.
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I like this a lot. My son did a Science project years ago where he took three plants and followed their response to external stimuli. One was on a turn table and the leaves grew out from it in a really cool way due to geotropism. One of them, the roots grew towards water that was placed near the plant due to hydrotropism. One of them bent completely towards a light due to phototropism. It was pretty cool. Don't mean to bore you with all of this but your poem reminded me of just how human plants can be. lol or just how plant-like humans can be... depending how you look at it. Excellent poem and Author notes!
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Thank you for this wonderful comment. Not boring at all! Very cool information...for another poem
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"my body bends
to your body
catching the sun"
Ahhh...& no matter which way the wind blows, they lean together, bracing each other so that both survive...Beautifully penned, Sweetie...I had to laugh at the comment that there wasn't enough of a poem to comment on. I swear, Sweetie...first they're too long, then too short. Well, sometimes more is not better, it's just more. People can get too wordy & cloud the issue, & often do. This is succinct, powerful & pure, my Friend...with just the right amount...Good luck in Tara's contest... Wanda
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Yeah, LOL I had to laugh at that too Thanks
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I love the last three lines; the metaphor fits the sunflower perfectly. Enjoyed!
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Thank you
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"the curtain of my face"
Words are beautiful as wildflowers. Great write!
Best of luck to all of us! Thanks for sharing. Keep writing my friend.
>>>VIRGOAN
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beautiful vocabulary abounds
throughout this piece! amazing what you have done with this image and the prompt... truly lovely and masterful, artful use of language -- the final three stanzas really clench it for me... somewhat stark in contrast to the very delicate beginning, but a smooth and flawless transition!
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I love that last line about "catching the sun" - it is absolutely gorgeous!
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wow...i never knew that about flowers lol...daytime motion...thats interesting do u mean as they bloom? loved the poem btw...my names OZ...im making my rounds n meeting new people...noticed u on NICOLETTES comments thought id say hi
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Thanks soldiersoul. Flowers and other plants have a tendency to turn their blooms or their foliage towards the sun during the day. Ever notice a plant leaning towards a window, then in the morning it's straight again? That's heliotropism as pertaining to plant life Thanks for the lovely comment.
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beautiful write i enjoyed this lovely flow and wonderful images, love this next line cause it was great simple as. best of luck in this contest
a pollination
of stem and stone
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a great photo and wonderful poem to match the beauty of this flower. Enjoyed reading this poem so early in the morning........ best of luck in this contest!
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LOL! Oh, how I love this one! WONDERFUL! This is a masterpiece, for real. Must go in the next book...
Placing it in Feature...
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LOL, sorry Timothy. I deleted my original reply. I was replying to someone else with that Anyway, thanks for enjoying this one and yes, I believe this one will go in the next book. Thanks so much
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This poem makes me feel sunshine on my face, like the presence of a loved one, unable to take my eyes, my face away from the warmth...I love this...a wonderful coloring of the picture...I feel it Thanks so much for this entry!
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Thanks Glad you enjoyed this one...and felt it
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Sweet,
This poem to me yet simple says volumes. Your scheme and wording give a sense of what is going on with the plant mentioned herein. I felt a sense of seeing this through your minds eye. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. Rich.
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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the curtain of my face;
how thin the light
passes through it
but you moved me
woow! yeah this poem is beautiful in simplistic purity, symbolicly magic for the sun shines our identity every day, and dream reflected at night, to grow and so in time moved with the deeper stones of the earth and sky blue, love would smile at this caught and true - with orange juice -jas
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Thank you. What a lovely comment. I so appreciate it.
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Excellent
Wonderful and creative exploration on the subject. Thank you for adding the author's notes.
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Thanks ....and you're welcome
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I'm sorry but there is not enough of a poem for me too comment on, however thus said I feel your use of flowers to portray feeling is good. There just wasn't not enough for me
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The idea of this is quite amazing and intense, I really like the images.
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Good first stanza. I like it. It is written with such subtlety.
Second stanza is a great transition.
As for the rest of the poem, you do a great job of somehow making the flower feel human. When I read this poem, I feel like a flower, which is no easy task. This is a great poem.
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I so loved the metaphor you've applied here, my friend. This is simply wonderful poetry... so love the movement and the change caused by the sun (and the warmth of the loved one). Love is always response and that is evident here. Beautiful poetry!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you Nicolette You read right into the heart of this
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I loved the way you suggested your likeness to the flowers. I wonder if there is a word that describes motions of bodies at night? Best of luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Thank you Leo! Glad you enjoyed.
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This is beautiful!
Such wonderful imagery ...
As you said, lol Tara will have a difficult time judging this!
Another amazing entry you have penned here
Lynda
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Thank you Lynda
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