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All the oceans in this world

can't hold the tears I've cried

Nothing in this world

Can take away this pain inside

I can't believe you're gone from me

I can't believe it's true

I never wanted memories

I only wanted you

I miss the little things you said

Those words that meant so much

I miss your eyes -- your laugh -- your smile

I miss your every touch

I miss you every morning

Every night & Every day

I give all my tommorows or just one more yesterday

You were my every reason

My hopes & all my dreams

Someone to believe in

When I question what 'life' means

Always there to guide me

My forever shining star

I give my all to have you here

Or be there where you are

In a world of changes

it's the soul that never dies

In a world of strangers

I still see me in your eyes

This pain will never go away

My shattered heart won't mend

Lonely days and empty nights

are now my only friends

But if you could see me for one last time--

You will see

That part of you

Is a part of me.

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This poem belongs to my friend, please keep comments normal and don't put crap like 'cool' and end it like that. Seriously.

This belongs to my friend, plese keep the comments nice and critical.

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  • Mariana gold member
    October 10, 2008
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    Such a heartfelt beautiful poem...Well Done!


  • think of me x
    September 13, 2007

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    I almost thought of a lover.. but at the same time, I thought of my (ex)best friend. It almost made me cry, not just because of the meaning but because it's one of the best pieces I've read in a long time. My inspiration is no longer poetic, just endless ranting. So it's nice to read things that give hope... It really is the most hurtful, the darkest and most painful things that birth beauty.


  • LadyUnique silver member
    August 28, 2007

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    oh that monster... 'heartbreak'

    I enjoyed the rhyme in this. for the most part the beat is steady. i stumbled in a few places (as far as meter goes) but sometimes it's how one reads the poem.

    solid write

  • The Exercated
    August 28, 2007

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    purtyfull indeed; Compliments to this friend of yours. Hell, I've come to know that feeling well myself... but that's a different story


  • awannabepoet
    August 28, 2007

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    Love eternal and shattered souls

    Surely it is of a soul lost for love once had is now forever gone, distant are the realities yet close are the memories. Your beating heart drives you through these trying times that your body and mind may yet heal but your soul will forever mourn the loss of this eternal love.

    I like it, I like it so.


  • Dragons Lady
    August 28, 2007

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    A beautifully poignant poem. A love lost, either by death or break up, is difficult. It's difficult to deal with but the memories of that love and all it held should be cherished. The emotions simply pour from this poem. I love it. I wish your friend the best of luck and hope that in time he/she will mend.


  • SocraticMindstate
    August 28, 2007

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    I know i may sound daft, but did the poets love die, or simply leave? Either way, I can feel the emotion coming through, it speaks directly to a situation I just got out of


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 26, 2007

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    To bad your friend wouldn't join and then post her poetry on her site. She writes well and would benefit I think from getting on here. That way I would give her the applauds she deserves. Maybe you could persude her to do that. Liked theh rhythm, rhyme, flow and brevity of the lines. Wonderful ending too.


  • kooleyes
    August 26, 2007

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    This poem is very beautiful. The imagery and flow are awesome. Your friends emotions come throught nicely on this piece. Thanks for the read and keep on writing.

  • JustBreathe gold member
    August 26, 2007

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    An emotional and heartfelt poem describing the emptiness and sadness of losing a loved one.

    "All the oceans in this world
    can't hold the tears I've cried
    Nothing in this world
    Can take away this pain inside
    I can't believe you're gone from me
    I can't believe it's true
    I never wanted memories
    I only wanted you"

    Very touching. Thank you for sharing this ....JustBreathe


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 26, 2007

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    nice ryhmn. a good read flowed welll i enjoyed this yeah yourfriend has done well with this so sad i feel for him/her great writing


  • eRmOiSlEy
    August 17, 2007

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    Tears alone can't describe how this made me feel. Like someone grabbed my heart and laid it all out in words. You literally brought tears to my eyes. I won't say more for fear I'll spoil the memories...

    "In a world of changes
    it's the soul that never dies"

    If I wished for anything I'd wish for these words to be true.

    Utterly breathtaking.I'm still finding it hard to breathe.

  • TaintedPriestess
    August 15, 2007
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    Love the raindrops

    I can't really tell you anything about your poem, because those raindrops are bloody distracting!

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