stumbling on through doors not locked
falling further back through time
I had left this life behind!
perhaps not...
stomaching conviction pains
blood-stained hands and grapefruit eyes
thought by now I'd realize
my weakness...
deceived by an easy road
full of obstacles it proves
thorny roses, lusty nudes
I need to:
Author notes
this is about being addicted to porn, and trying to break that addiction.
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CAN YOU RELATE???
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I can't really relate to it..but like all addictions, I believe that it'll be really hard to break out of it.. but nonetheless one should try as this is an unhealthy way of living yeah...
Good write tho
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well done . . liked "falling futher back through time" and "thorny roses, lusty nudes" . .
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I can't relate at all to this so I'm not so sure as to what to say here, um.....i gues whoevrs trying to break that addiction good luck with that
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cant say i can relate "to this addiction" others addictions i can but needless what the addiction is it is all still something you try and over come from what ever it maybe. just know though you will have many hard times down the path even after you think you are 100% clean from your issue that you still will face hard times amazing write dear!
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Wow this realy potrays the pain and effort that you are pouuting into trying to quit. I can't really relate to this but venting is good
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Wow this is really hardcore... An addiction is hard to break especially when you try to do it alone, your poem definatly showed your pain
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I have never been addicted to something like porn, but you make it obvious of how it feels from this pome. GREAT JOB!!! *GRIN* kEEP IT UP..
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i agree that this is a really abstract piece but i didn't know it was about porn addiction until i read your author's notes. sorry, it is a little confusing. but i enjoyed the imagery that was illustrated.
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Hmm... That is a neat way of looking at it, very abstract. Until I read that line about 'lusty nudes' at the end, I almost had no idea that porn was the addiction. very well done, best of luck.
L.
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I can't personally relate... However, my brother was once addicted to porn, and has had a major struggle in overcoming it... He still has trouble...And even though it's his struggle, it's my family struggle too because we want to help him as much as we can...and it breaks our hearts to see him struggle so hard with it...
I'm praying for you Pap!
Very strong message... Definitely describes the struggle in depth...
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AMAZING
you did wonderful telling your story of addiction and though everyone has their own story relating to this I can indeed thanks for sharing
stumbling on through doors not locked
falling further back through time
I had left this life behind!
perhaps not...
stomaching conviction pains
blood-stained hands and grapefruit eyes
thought by now I'd realize
my weakness...
deceived by an easy road
full of obstacles it proves
thorny roses, lusty nudes
I need to:
EVERY SINGLE WORD IS MY FAVORITE
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nice.
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great poem=) i think i can relate a little bit, i loved the imagry and the "I need to:" at the end
geart job
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wow very nice, this is clear and full of your emotion. this is a very strong piece,i love the way you have used your words. beautiful work hun,. this is great
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I felt it... nice abstract imagery... probably a good self reminder too (which im guessing was part of the intention?)
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the message was clear that the person thought they were strong enough to break away but found not. the poem spoke so much turth hat anyone can be strong though yet it also showed the downcomes of things
a powerful write
well done
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I see no reason that porn shouldnt be watched but thats my opinion.lol. Otherwise i like the way the poem is set up. overall i like the way it is expressed thumbs up.
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Very well expressed, and thanks for your honesty..always a plus when it flows in poetry..Thanks for sharing you...Timothy aka poeticweaver
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