My prince of darkness
Devil to the eye
But not thy heart
Look upon you, slight distress
Souls who see only a pentagram
Lyrics of death, who curse thy God
But still, a heart of snow
Locks of gold, flow at your back
Swaying in the distance
So far away,
My prince of darkness
Only a voice may I hear,
A voice for this forsaken one
Touch of death, it's what I seek
A sin you and I,
To many who live in a pew
We are outcasts of heaven
Exiled for our love
And hermits for our blackness
Head held high above the grave
Expecting our fate, you're my nemesis
My prince of darkness
Devil to the eye
But not thy heart
Look upon you, slight distress
Souls who see only a pentagram
Lyrics of death, who curse thy God
But still, a heart of snow
So sweet your words of love
Sweet as the taste of your blood
Penetrating fangs to flesh
Filling the blackness of my soul
Awaiting death, no stress, no pain
Black metallic box, six feet down
Side by side my prince and I.
A contest entry
- Black planet by DeepDarkDesire.
700 points, ended September 25, 2007, 9 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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WoW, Very Nice! I loved this. So dark and wonderful.
Thank you for entering and I'm so sorry that it took me so long to judge the contest.
Claire-Anne -
nice poem with sad tune.
Best wishes and good luck
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Great imagery, and nice use of repetition.
Good Luck,
Erika
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Interesting scheme
I like this, reminds me of an A2 canvas with a bucket of black paint just splattered across it. Blunt, but subtle all at the same time. I love antagonism and this has a flair about it that reminds me of the older days of Goth.
The repetition is just right, it reiterates your point beautifully and this line:
We are outcasts of heaven
Makes it all for me.
Great job poet
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Thank you. I'm glad you like it. I'm working one another one like it. but as of now, I haven't written any of it done it's in my mind.
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Very dark.
I liked this piece.
It's a dark love poem.
Good use of imagery, as well, my dear.
Dark love, in my oppinion, is some of the best. lol.
Very good write!
Keep it up. :]
xx.
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