Bitter from the moment,
The light met my eyes.
I lay cold and uncomfortable,
like a corpse between each life time
allowing the vultures to take there share.
The abundent thoughts pound,
As i heal old wounds
Which dreams restore.
But everytime i blink there are sonic booms,
Behind my eyeilds and screams in my throat.
It's probably self-pity,
but i feel like shit.
The signs and signals,
Warn me of impending doom.
Where's the heartbeat lulling a smile?
It's throbbing through each obstacle,
My undesired destined fate,
As the rain washes away the memories
And seeps deep to the gutter.
It's trying to reach me
How far can it reach,
Can you answer me that?
Author notes
A poem written and merged by myself and pink absinthe (ciaran) on a pessimistic day!
"drug coctail" contest entry...
A contest entry
- Candy Coated Lies && Acid Tears by ThnxsForTheMmrs-x-.
425 points, ended August 23, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me feel your hurt by xxTheRadFreakxx.
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Humm very wonderful,,, i liked it alot. Was very different,thats for sure,, great job. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest and in the futre. very great I like the topic,, and the flow and theme all thou i am not 100% sure i understand it complelty it is brilliant in its own wwonderful way,, thank you once again,,
keep the pen moving and the ennergy flowing
KayDee -
Very Nice
Apart from a few spelling mistakes it's a prety cool poem
Can you tell me what's it about? cause i have a thought but decided not to put it down. oh and the word 'shit' ruins the effect.
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Its a poem me and ciaran wrote together, we were both in bad moods and we decided to write a poem! Im really happy with it
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