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Lonesome Pine

The beauty of the forest,

Trees green and fully grown,

Once standing so majestically,

Now one stands all alone,

 

No family left to entwine with,

No shade from elder pines,

No quiet rustling from brother and sister,

No more creeping vines, 

 

Waiting, painfully waiting,

Standing tall and lean,

No friendship in the forest,

His future sadly forseen,

 

The whirring of the chainsaw,

Giving him a chill,

The sound of the petrol motor,

Getting closer still,

 

The silence in the forest,

You know the job is done,

He finally joined his family,

In the heat of the midday sun.

 

Author notes

2) "Write from the point of view of the last tree standing in the forest"

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  • Pixie Tag!!

    Merry meet,

    What a wonderful poem and defineately worth the Gold.
    Sometimes, I am really afraid for the survival of the human species because of what we are doing to Gaia.


    Amythest

    NOW it's your turn to tag another Pixie. please?


  • LittleMoon silver member
    February 4

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    Beautifully done with such understanding of nature. A sadness captured with very well chosen words. A worthy gold winner


  • DolphinLass silver member
    August 23, 2007
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    wow great write congrats

  • crimsondew silver member
    August 23, 2007

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    AWWW... this is sad...You have captured the lonliness and longingness well...
    Very well written... Congrats on the gold.


  • Kindredblood
    August 16, 2007

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    ouch makes me sad in a way, tree's stand for hundreds of years, just to be turned into timber, each ring stands for time, to cut that short is so sad, you have written this so well, capturing a subject that leaves echoes, and a message in a way, kill a tree and you kill me, for without tree's there is no life.
    Beautifulyl written and composed, a real privilage to read such realism.


  • tawk gold member
    August 15, 2007

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    Awwww this is so sad. I could feel how sad this lone tree was. Wonderful imagery and emotions. Good luck in the contest


  • captain howdy
    August 14, 2007

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    I could feel the anguish of the last tree just waiting helplessly and hopelessly to meet the same fate. Great poem. Great rhyme. Best of luck in the contest! Thanks for entering!


  • Radiance
    August 14, 2007

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    This piece had truly amazing imagery. Your rhyming was so fitting, and the flow went so easily. i really enjoyed this one. Thank you for sharing this.


  • deadpixie020
    August 14, 2007

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    oh my gosh.

    This was awesome! I always have trouble rhyming, and you made it seem so effortless -- I'm terribly jealous. I could see and feel everything. Just fantastic.

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