PARK, Park yourself down and take a seat
below my feet opposite this mini-step-ladder
Ask you what you'd like to see and hear?
provision's take requested with religious
concept of your lands current prescription.
Sunday afternoon words seem to jot down
Along the parks partition then someone had
The cheek to ask permission to enquire
about current issues and reminised about...
How Harold used to sipher petrol from Russia
We laughed about the cold war; then relished
in it's topical currency, then again about
the euro and how it stood with Marx.
Speaking for hours about books and rushed
Our verses, as I stood high on my pedestal
there in Hyde Park no-one interjected or
once tried to explain the origins of
Cultural Studies.
However I later found a forum that spoke
about gory details this however did not
require a live audience. I found it hard
sitting still at the computer with
rollerblades on. The audience did not see
however how cool you actually had to be
to speak out!
Author notes
Robbwindow: Burning live words and old flags.
A contest entry
- Like Strands of Fist and Bone by Saint Gut-Free.
600 points, ended October 7, 2007, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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very interesting one, Mr. Bridge.
Prey tell, where is the poem for Petra?
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"no-one interjected or
once tried to explain the origins of
Cultural Study."
You've brought up an interesting tangent of thought in this poem; which I feel is best represented by the above lines- Is free speech extended to the right to speak uninterrupted, or merely the opportunity to speak in the first place?
You have some great imagery and examples, all of which were very well placed, and your setting of Speaker's Corner is wonderful.
For the sake of being pedantic, because I've been giving one area for improvement for each contestant thus far; your flow stumbles every here and there due to sentence lengths- some pauses and inflections here and there would breathe a lot of life into this piece and elevate it from brilliant to near perfect.
Great work here, and best of luck.
On a final note, could you please add your username to your author's notes? This is so that if you go on to the next round, I know who you are in order to invite you, and to ensure that I don't send two of your poems through, lol.
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Not bad
and yes I often speak amongst the selfs. Blessed be those who invite me as their favourites, Well done Marc.
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