Watching the canoe, viewing its wide passing shores
A tiny canoe upon my distance, confused is he in thoughts
Similar to my mind confused in how to go with this life
Oh rescue me from these sands of restless heartaches
As I am alone again without your touch to love me again
I wonder is that you my love, my dreams to come
Not knowing that I would give my whole being to you
Flickers, the dim light, contemplating his own decisions
Seems like the lighthouse has its own tribulations too
What has love will surely lose and what has none will surely gain
Similar to the dawn when she loses her love everynight
And the night when she gains her love everyday
The silence beats with my thoughts of you
I don’t want to live within this lovely thought of you
Only makes this beautiful night seem angry
As well as dawn so lovely makes her seem much less
Every sand that comes within my palm substitutes for
The petals of gorgeous memories, I throw within the shores
I don’t care to wave a hand in case that is you
For I know that you know where I am
I’m tired of showing you that I truly love you and want you
It's time you show me these things and know
That my heart hurts and smiles from the same things
that causes your heart to hurt and smile
Perhaps the sadness is only what I give to myself
So I walk pass this shore and so love this imagery
Unlike you, night will leave and come back soon
“Good night, lovely night,
Forever bye, my angry love”
Author notes
x thank you, please, but your flattery is truly not becoming me, your eyes are poor, youre blind, you see, no beauty could have come from me. im a waste. of breath. of space. of time.
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A contest entry
- Goodbye Home by HisPrincessMaloka.
320 points, ended October 15, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Gold trophy winner
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A beautiful write to be sure, but I'm afraid it far exceeds the word limit of my contest... I'm guessing you didn't read the rules too closely, but thanks for the nice read anyhow
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Beautiful.
i'm left speechless after reading this gorgeous poem... that leaves behind great imagery your masterpiece has created!
This is most definitely a heart-felt poem... very touching indeed! your words sunk deep into my heart! the emotions were so raw and powerful! overall, this was a meaningful, sad and a poem that has great depth! Your words just pierced right through my heart!
Thank you ever so much for this lovely read and for entering my contest! best woshes... and pls do add the prompt in your AN! thanks!
Much love alwyas,
Ranji
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woh.......so many big words, i had to whip out the dictionary
this picture creates a beautiful image in my mind it is exellent Good Luck!!!!
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"The silence beats with my thoughts of you
I don’t want to live within this lovely thought of you"
Oh I love those lines! This piece is truly beautiful, and full of imagery. I really like it. However, you broke a rule, so I can't consider this in my contest. Sorry! -
The silence beats with my thoughts of you
I don’t want to live within this lovely thought of you
Only makes this beautiful night seem angry
As well as dawn so lovely makes her seem much less
bahh. im not sure what to say besides im in love. this was beautiful. =]
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Thank you. This imagery is very strong. Very sad and moving poem. Thank you for submitting.
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Real quick, before I read it, if you wouldn't mind just temporarily placing the option number in the authoer's box, please.
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“Good night lovely night,
Forever bye, my angry love”
Those were powerful lines.
~SweetAmber~
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Well this is a great write! I can see the pain you have been holding inside of you. Now it's exploding on the page in a good, healthy way. Blessed Be! ~~Shannon~~
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amazing poem you got here so real and emotional. I loved it. good luck in my contest!
xo
kandy
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