Translucant caricature,
raised to shimmering fragility
open to Gaen embrace,
flora essences,
flowing in rhythm,
as silver stream under shining sun
washes into pallid lips,
crooning whisper, as zephyrs sweeps
Could I pray for sweeter breaths?
Fragrant air,
rising in spiralling moments
Seeping liquid,
pours from wound
to open mouth
Author notes
picture promtp
A contest entry
- PIF QUICKIE! 10/40/50 by Namita.
300 points, ended August 14, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - pif - Enter your best quickie pre-write by tara wilson.
1200 points, ended September 20, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie Quest ~ Prewrite Party 2 by Namita.
300 points, ended October 6, 2007, 95 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Asfandie!! I already commented once dummy. What do u want again... LOL. Just kiddding. I LOVE YOU.
Luv,
~Candy
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I owe you and Candy a few comments by now, Asfand, and I'm so happy that I've found this lovely one too. Wonderful interpretation of breathing shadow here, spiced with fragrance!
~ Nicolette
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This is very tranquil and beautiful, elegant,
"Could I pray for sweeter breaths?"
I love all the imagery and I just love questions in poetry, thank you
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nice imagery and metaphor here, nice and light and airy, almost like a breath of fresh air. best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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Ahh, I really don't know what to say about this. It is so beautiful! You seem to have an endless supply of beautiful words to use
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This is astounding...Lovely imagery...
All the best!
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You opened my mouth. Really you did, now I'm gaping at this. An amazing piece.
Candy
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this is one great write my dear friend
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the shadow washes over all
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Your prompt is the picture on the contest page or the phrase "breathing shadow" Candy :f
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