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"Finding the Slayer" ---- Vampire Chronicles 9

I entered the town, in the darkness of night,
looking for the slayer, ready to fight.
Cordova seemed peaceful, odd little town,
so many people, walking around.

It was him, who put these thoughts in their hearts,
that it was safe to walk, even after dark.
"Excuse me, sir...", asking a passer by,
where is this slayer, who is cunning and sly?"

looking my way, staring into my eyes,
"The one you seek, he's in the pub, inside."
Across the street, I walked real slow,
out the pub door, I seen him go.

"You! Yes you!", I shouted towards him,
he turned my way, with a funny grin.
"This night is your last...", I started to say,
When he seen who I was, he came my way.

"I know who you are...", he said with Satan's fire,
"This night you die, King of the Vampires!".
From his side, he drew his sword,
walking sideways, "Shall we start, my Lord?"

"For I am the first, stronger then all,
your sword is useless, tonight, you fall!"

The battle ended quickly, in death he did lay,
I stood over his body, these last words I did say,
"Weak and foolish mortals, this warning I give,
do not resist us, if you want to live!"

Back to my home, I did flee,
for tonight.... I have the victory!

 

 

 

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  • SweetRoses
    May 20, 2008

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    I really liked this. Most people would have had the slayer win instead of the vampire. I love the way you wrote it in a non-predictable way. Nicely done.


  • shadow of the void
    October 9, 2007
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    great work. the slayer got what he deseved.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    September 13, 2007
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    Nice battle to observe! Very enjoyable read.

    Blessings~
    Az


  • onesugar gold member
    August 19, 2007

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    Gripping from start to finish
    sorry it's took a while to
    catch up.
    Wicked (literally)
    Hugs ~onesugar~


  • Dragons Lady
    August 17, 2007
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    Excellent work yet again. Loved it through to the very last word. Good luck in the contest.


  • malevolent
    August 17, 2007
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    I really think this should be published (the chronicals as a set). It is fantasticly written just like all of your other work. It needs to be inthe hands of readers.


  • lameass loser
    August 16, 2007

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    wow this is a really good poem
    love how your words tell a story and make you feel your actually there :


  • malevolent
    August 16, 2007

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    Awesome! I would love it if you would read some of my stuff and give me your opinion. You have some brilliant talent!


  • captain howdy
    August 15, 2007
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    Very well written story you've penned here!


  • Forbidden Tempest
    August 14, 2007

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    I saw this and Just got lost for awhile (had to start from one) I have to say this one is my favourite, you really do know how to put a compelling story into poetic from...Well done...I shall be waiting for ten.


  • joleahe
    August 14, 2007

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    hermano grande...i love these poems! they keep getting better and better.....so breathtaking! loved it like always!


  • Fallen Under Light
    August 14, 2007

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    Woo Hoo!!! Yay!!! I am finally getting more wonderful entries... like this one!!! thanks for entering. I loved how you created a story in poetic form. WONDERFUL JOB!!!

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