Throughout the years
Through broken glass
Through broken hearts
And trampled grass
My favorite memory
Remains of you
When you wrote to me
"I love you too"
It turned out to mean
Nothing at best
Because you loved her,
It was all in jest
But I'll always remember
The day at the beach
When I learned happiness
Only sadness can teach
Author notes
Option 5
A contest entry
- Quickie Contest- Aug/2007 Pre-Writes Only by Mercury Rising.
600 points, ended August 16, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 12 And Under, Young Writers Only! Prompt: "Your Favorite Memory" by Cupcrazy.
450 points, ended August 23, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Just Do It by Facial Pagan.
520 points, ended August 24, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - IF YOU WANT EASY POINTS AND A SHINY TROPHY... by lexie like woah.
675 points, ended September 14, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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great write, option number please. it is sweet and has a great rhyme and flow to it. thanks for entering and good luck.
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Sorry, I picked option number 5. Thank you for taking the time to comment!
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Oops, I guess I did read it.
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Fantabulous!!! So happy and sad all at the same time...like a zebra bar...great write!
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A zebra bar? I'll have to try that sometime. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment, glad you enjoyed my poem.
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A wonderful poem, I loved the deep perception of the last lines. This is a very emotional and tangibly felt piece. A wonderful entry, thank you. Hugs, Bunny
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wow, what a deep and touching poem. So many people can relate to this, that is one of the many beauties of this poem. I like especially the first stanza, because i enjoy repetion 'cause it can emphasize a point, and i like the last stanza, because it is the over all message of the story and i like the rhyme. Beautiful poem!
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I'm glad you liked this poem, and I have to say that I really like repitition too. I thnk you could do a great job in my contest, prewrites are allowed. *hint*
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ME! meee! i relate to this!!!
deep and rather sad, sound like me
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Yay! Thank you for relating.
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truly touching i dig it
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Wow! Another good poem!
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