her eyes are written in orange latin --
a whisper of bible pages
water-marked
with imagination.
scintillating scarves
frisk in fingers’ tip,
and crocheted questions
curl about her shoulders
like a lover’s hug.
tapestries move
in her hallway --
spinning autumnal tales
for long-legged spiders
suspended in castle archways.
parchment memories
hang from the ceiling
like windchimes
& rustling leaves.
ant colonies
dressed in paper-dust
spell out secrets
on each wall,
while a graphite-shelled
beetle sorts thoughts
in a pool of dragon smoke
by her open windows;
mandarin-peel clouds
gravitate towards her lips
in shapes of cats with wings;
art is her afternoon oxygen,
rich as sunset citrus rind.
her fingers flit like crayons
asking hieroglyphic questions
to the world
& I think she must
have painted the sky
just for me.
Author notes
An expansion of egyptian. Inspired by the prompt 'Artistic Mess'.
DancingRed
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In a list
A contest entry
- The Champion 3: Round 12 (Finals) [Part 5/6] by Tangled Angle.
300 points, ended August 19, 2007, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poems for my wall by Lauren Noir.
650 points, ended August 31, 2007, 83 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments are most welcome.
Comments
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This is amazing
Just amazing
Imageary was so strong,so powerful
The metaphors were deep, in there, amazing and so unique I almost jumped for joy
The description was amazing, ti was so well done, I saw and felt everyting
it was so unique, when I opened this link I couldn't have counted on anything inside being like this
It was so interesting, I was entranced
Well done
Good luck
Thanks for entering
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Wonderful
Very well done. Great description. Congratulations on the bronze.
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Excellent, the abstracted imagery is so well phrased and put together- and so interesting. Every line, every word, every metaphor all used carefully.. The syntax is very good here.
When you came into the contest, my expectation was that you would do great, but I feel you have raised the bar very high... you could definitely win this.
And if you don't, so what? You did amazingly well. -
What wonderful word combinations you have used in these lines - flows well and so filled with vivid visuals throughout. Great expansion of egyptian.
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parchment memories
hang from the ceiling
like windchimes
& rustling leaves
I hate you - why can't I write like this? No, of course I don't hate you. I enjoyed the exceptional flow and your magical use of words and ideas. thanks so much for brightening my dull day.
Donald
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