it reaches teaches
breathes lives
charms moves
joys saddens
weeps laughs
shakes enthralls
dances duets
feels happys
shelters warms
cools suns
loves dreams
reflects colors
strums funs
summers autumns
winters springs
mountains lakes
oceans skys
stars highs
lows truths
remembers serenes
wonders flys
crys souls
and it serenades
me
Author notes
spelling is intentionally free...random thoughts while listening to a john denver concert
A contest entry
- III by M a r l u x i a.
4000 points, ended February 16, 131 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Songs can teach us. Everyone and everything is a teacher if we just listen...
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magnificent!
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Thoughts like these can be pulled together and create a magnificent poem, such as this. I love how it all sounds melodic as I read it. Each line is a "note", and it's so beautifully written... Random, multiple thoughts relating to one topic can really bring about a great read, and this is a great example of that.
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Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!
M a r l u x i a
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Whoa this was good, I got from it the different types of things that are found in songs of all types besides love songs.
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i love the way you put this piece together.
its lovely.
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REHAB-x
Thank you for your lovely words!! This little poem was fun to write...all those good things!!Warm Regards...vivela
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good poem
your love of art shows through your poetry
thats great
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Good write here
Yes I like John Denver myself and my favorite song of his is rocky mountain high for within his words visions do apear
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The flow of this poem is extraordinary! I love the bouncing feeling I get when reading it. The word choice is phenomenal and overflows with such creativity! Fantastic write!
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Nice one!
Your creativity shows in this one. I liked the free spirit of writing described here. BRILLIANT! Thanks so much for sharing!!
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Absolutely beautiful!!!
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great write, love what i see so far,
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dances duets
feels happys
shelters warms
cools suns
loves dreams
reflects colors
love this part keep up the great work!
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excellent
in every way! I love!
smile,
Judy
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Very Good
lows truths
remembers serenes
wonders flys
crys souls
and it serenades
me
Very well done
My spelling errors are NOT intentional... lol
Rick
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Someone was just telling me to try this? Listen to music while writing? I will now...
Thank-you for sharing.
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Wow!
To feel all of those emotions all at once is just so awesome - I liked your flow in this...
strums funs
summers autumns
winters springs
mountains lakes
oceans skys
stars highs
Using opposites making them flow - and to have an influence that reaches and teaches you all from a song. Vey well expressed
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i like this. its fun and i am a closet john denver fan hehehe
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amazingly amazing!
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Unusual approach
Atypical approach and interesting juxtapositions flirting with the border between prose and poetry with a refreshing background and controlled random as much as random controlled thought/image flow
whether or not the notes are transformed into an individual composition the post is welcome given the notes which appear to have been extended since I first saw this piece - unless of course Alzheimer is taking over
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After reading your author note, this makes perfect sense to me. I love it! But I am a huge John Denver fan as well! Great job on this one!!!
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Very calming,
Loving this write!
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Purple Pen
Good poetry makes us feel - something . This tickled something in my memory. It recalls a full-moon night I was high above the crowd on a scissor-lift at a John Denver concert. He sang about the moon in Shanghai. I just got goose bumps again. Wonderful imagery! -
had a nice flow
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Serenes, as far as I'm concerned, is not actually a word. Do you mean it in the sense of.. is serene? I guess? I have no idea lol. Sorry, I was trying to piece that together.
The random words became tedious after a while. Maybe fit something more substantial in there?
Hope I helped.
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I enjoyed some of the word combinations you used, and others felt a bit arbitrary to me. The idea is nice and, like I said, some of the poem worked well within the confides of its limitations. However, the disconnected words and thoughts were a little too disconnected at times, and it bordered on rambling to me.
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Beautiful, each single word with a paragrapk of meaning.
I love this.
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songs do all that
Poem that runs with feelings and then exclaims and proclaims its colors ...reads like each notes of a song that touches the soul.
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very pretty....reminds me why i love music the way i do..lovely lovely poem
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Reminds me of word associations where one word leads to another and that to another and so on. Lovely notes for a love song - very lyrical as well.
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Hello, A very lovely write. I love all the phrases you use to describe love. It is a beautiful thing. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy
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Very impressive write
I love the words so expressive with your words, I like how your did Feeling and emotion first, than changed to nature. Thank you of sharing
LISA
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This is awesomely remarkable. I viewed your wbpg and so please to see your are a painter!!!! I am a painter first and writer after althought i don't know anymore Your stuff is very Matisse, Hans Hoffman and Helen Frankentaler. Fauve colors like your words. Wish i could go to one of your opening! Vous parlez francais je crois? La Sorbonne and U of M!! Impressive. Anger with me stays 1-2 secs and leave. I can't stand the feeling of it! Your poem shows extra loving care. I like these short lines of words, steps to a meeting place, some perspective in belief. Beautiful!
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