Jewel is my dog.
She is such a hog.
I love her very much,
so much,
that she doesen't
live in a hutch.
She loves people food.
So much,
that it makes her
in a good mood.
She is also very rude.
She caught a baby rabbit
once,
but she couldn't make
it her habbit.
Please tell me what you think
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pikacute!
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Ooooh! I love it!
Awesome poem. It's really funny...
*biggrin*
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You gave me good things that I dearly want to explain why they are wonderful
Your rhyming fits so well in this general funny piece of yours! At first, I thought "She is such a hog" was sort of odd, and even forced rhyme tipping the title as my mamma originally wondered. But, after I thought about it, maybe your female canine is large which then, has an instinct to have family later on like an "heirloom" -- and that's why she eats a big amount other than for her size! It could be a gorgeous building on... It's normally thought of as excessive, but it might not be necessary.
Lines 3, 4, 5 and 6 were my favorite collection of words within because they really showed your care for her. I once kept grasshoppers by a huge window with no cage. The sunshine was their leash with the chain of a grass tray. But, a few years later, when I brought in another set in a littler area, I hardly had the time to play with them and they were enclosed. I felt horrible for them, although I soon put them back in our back yard instead of in the small loft we live in. However, I'm glad it's easy with your pet.
I enjoyed this phrase as well: "it makes her in a good mood," relating to the few above verses. It shows that maybe you're not just giving her what is junk even to persons but what is truly nutritious that we eat too to make her sensitivity happy as these creatures may have.
Indeed, it is possible for, "She is also very rude" with a "roof, rough, roof." Just like the kindest people around, they might make mistakes as well. I like how the ending rolls in perfectly to settle the sadness that she bit a youngster bunny with, "but she couldn't make it her habbit." That can be very true, especially if you train her to like fed food better, and if you daily give it.
I found something that says dogs can live raw, if you want to check out my little excerpt =
Molly and Bunker, our two dogs are 100% vegan raw food dogs (raw vegan food I developed for them) and have been for close to five years. They were 100 percent vegans before that. They are nine years old and actually appear to be getting younger every year... If attracted for more, you can IM me.
Your style on this poem anyway is well thought out,
Daisy
My mamma would've made this signature:
"I liked looking at your doggy through this window,
Daisy"
P.S. "Jewel" is a nice name, once you know your animal, the relationship can shine like a precious thing as that, joyously eventive! -
love it pika!
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Awwwww...................
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Your rhymes very well done. This poem well describes Jewel. I guess. Keep writing more poems. I'd love to read them.
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that was cute=]
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Aaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwww!!
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