Linda, oh Linda,
all dressed in black,
walks with her head down
and hands behind her back.
Linda, oh Linda,
with hair so short and dark.
Her eyes are dark and lifeless,
containing no spark.
Linda, oh Linda,
always being laughed at and pushed around.
She cannot escape this life,
for to it she is forever bound.
Linda, oh Linda,
so sad and so alone.
There's nobody to hold her.
She's left to live on her own.
Linda, oh Linda
feet shuffling on the floor.
Won't let anybody hit her
or give her crap anymore.
Linda, oh Linda
walks into school on a Friday.
She's ready to make her move,
ready to have fun and play.
Linda, oh Linda
they are worse on this date
for they have no idea
how God has planned their fate.
Linda, oh Linda
those kids pushing you around?
they will pay,
with their blood spilled on the ground.
Author notes
Inspiration: written for zeltria's "dark and morbid" contest. Based on a short story I read.
This is the weirdest poem ever (^_^). I have no idea where it came from since I don't do rhyme, and I try not to write too much dark poetry (although I do on occassion. usually the poem would be dark but with more saddness than angst). I made it interesting though. I made it rhyming to make it more like a nursery rhyme that just went horribly wrong. It went through the dark-o-rama machine and came out twisted and not appropriate for children (or even for some adults). Why is her name linda? i don't know, just a name that I came up with. I have two aunt lindas, but I don't think that's relevant.
Comments are always greatly appreciated as they always are (seriously, who wouldn't want a comment on their poetry?) Thanks!
~modernxtimes
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A contest entry
- Dark and Morbid by zeltria.
1000 points, ended August 31, 2007, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round contest #1 by serenity silvermoon.
600 points, ended March 26, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A great piece it almost seems like dark lyrics, however, the rules state that pre writes may not be entered if it has previously won awards. Sorry mate, but I'm gonna have to DQ it I'm sorry i did not catch it earlier. If you have any other dark rhymes that have not won awards if your up to creating one please feel free.
But I did want to let you know I love this and the Oh, Linda Oh linda, makes it especially dark and you earned well deserved awards. Good luck =)
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Congrats on the silver!
Great flow and rhyme. Superb piece, nice and dark. Love the ending. All the best in the contest with it
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Excellently dark, loved this poem. well done, thanks for entering and good luc
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wow. do you know someone named linda? I would watch out for her if you did. I don't think I will ever look at a sad kid the same way ever again. Wow. just wow. I think you understand the mind of someone who is homocidal. freaky if you ask me. You ever think of that before? you know... killing someone?
carli, oh carli
hehe. This just shows us to be nice to the emo kids
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I'm not sure why you don't write more dark poems because you are good at it.I've reading and writing dark poems for a long time, so I appreciate those who come with an interesting twist like the one you just wrote. I think Linda is a good choice of a name because it has that everyday feeling to it.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
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