The stars shine bright
As dots of silver diamonds
In the night sky
Until the bright sun
Arrives with shining rays of gold,
As far as the eye can see.
Is it a dream?
The wondrous beauty,
Of this world,
Fills me,
With such love and hope,
I can feel,
An angel watching over me.
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and Under Only ~ It's All about Nature! by Amunet Wolfbane.
525 points, ended August 15, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ***Ages 13 and UNDER*** WordBank by Electric Sunrise.
450 points, ended August 26, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very nicely done here, excellent write, there's not really much more i can say about it.
Thanks for entering the contest. Sorry it's taken so long
Best of luck
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Wonderful
This is great. I think it should win.
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i love this its really really good it painted a picture in my head so i knew i wasnt dead lol keep up the great work(i thought i was dreaming from a minute!)
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i love it
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Very good.
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For 13 and under, constrained by a wordbank, you've done a fine job. Nice sense of movement and rhythm. Fluid wording with not stumbles. And the extra line in the second stanza emphasizes the meaning of the final line. Keep writing. Good work.
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excellent
Awwww, Deep and inspiring. Nature is what makes this world beautiful. Every time I look at it, I become more convinced that there is more beauty around us than the world leaders and media want us to believe. I forget all the negative stuff and say to myself, I'm proud to be living on this planet. Very nice poem along with a beautiful picture. Well done.
Brian -
This poem came out awesome. Good luck sis, you deserve a gold.
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