Violent night
Darkened by fright
Bound on bed
Gun to head
Round the ankles and throat
Cord is tied
Feel the rapist creep up
Come inside
Eyes wide as you witness your death
Kiss me with your final breath
Violent night
My carnal desire
Masochist
Taste my fist
Bondage and whips,
With a cold bullet kiss
Feel your pulse fade beneath
Fingertips
Bleed in every place
Die for me Love, Rest in peace
Author notes
18.52 GMT
This should be 'sang' to the tune of 'Silent Night' It's a bit different, but I'm in the middle of twisting nursery rhymes and christmas carols, so I thought I'd enter one here.
A contest entry
- Release Inner Anguish (ROUND TWO) (Dark Poetry From Darker Poets). by Ravenblood.
3250 points, ended August 28, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The whole first stanza was just perfect...in every way. Rhyme, meter, imagery, chill factor. Everything. I felt the shiver. That's just horrid, and delightfully so. Good job!
~Kittii
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Thanks Kitti
I had fun 'twisting' this write, but it's what I'm good at, apparently, lol.
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment
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Congrats on the gold!
wickedly twisted...bound on bed, gun to head...I can feel the holiday cheer already
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Thanks Lady
This was the first carol I ever twisted, lol.
Glad you like it,it was fun to write
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woah, thats really creepy, almost to make someone afraid of Christmas..... (i have an idea).......
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Thanks Anne
I like twisting things, and some say I have a talent for it...
Glad you enjoyed this piece
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Wo now I'm scared! I can't do that good!
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Thanks Nicola
All I ask is that everyone tries their best
Glad you like this piece
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Well if I had read this before I entered your contest it would have scared me off from trying to impress(?) you with some of my own wit and dry humor... Nice job on twisting a classic!! I liked it!!!
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Thankyou very much.
I'm glad you enjoyed this piece.
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AH HAHA.....DEMON, i never get sick of this one
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You better be entering Syn, lol.
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oh my fucking god wooowwwww (breathless) thats so dark and morbid and twisted and i just frigging love it.
goes well with the song and the imagery is fantastic.
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Thank you very much
I like to warp the fragility of innocence.
I'm glad you enjoyed this piece
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HOLY MOTHERFUCKING SHIT THIS IS GOOD!!!!!!! AND IT GOES WIHT THE SONG!!!!! HAHAHAHAHAH......SILENT NIGHT......BOOM!
*all goes quiet*
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I like twisting innocence, does that make me a bad man? lol. Am working on 'Away In A Manger' at the moment, and some nursery rhymes. Glad you like this piece. It's probably one of my more unique pieces, lol.
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As I said when you first showed me, very dark, I like! Short and sharp, powerful stuff here.
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Thanks Wolfy Yeah, I like breaking innocence and destroying the dreams of children.....does that make me a bad man? lol
Santa, is an anagram for satan, but I'll not get into that, lol. Once more, Thankyou
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I read this before the authors notes and found it to be breath taking. After reading it to the tune of silent night, I found the ending line to be out of place (either that or I don't know my christmas carols...) but great write. Brilliant in fact. Usually when these types of parodies are written it turns something normal into something of a humorous nature but this is so much better.
Amazing work, good luck in the contest
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Nicely done dmonik. Like the words u used. good luck
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Thankyou very much Wicked. Glad you enjoyed it And thanks for your good luck wishes
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Woah, very nicely written. Thanks for entering. I think this one is certainly going into the finals.
I'm glad that i have a habit of reading the Authors notes before i read the actual poem though, it read very nicely to the tune of silent night.
Claire-Anne
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