They try to break her
But fail...
For she bends
They’ll want to crack her
And find...
She’s already open
14-08-07
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lol lol... you are so right on... "flexibility" is in fact written everywhere else... on sticky notes behind my bedroom door... on random pieces of paper... even in the books i'm reading themselves on doing business or handling life well.
But, that's exactly why I'm leaving the actual word behind this feeling out. I think in order to be flexible... i can't exactly attempt at it consciously for the purpose would be defeated! It's more a process than an ends in itself... if you get what i mean at all... so that's why it's gonna remain "untitled" (at least for a while)
Thanx again Ted 4 not only noticing but 4 also understanding <3
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I'm not sure if your intention was to keep this titled as "Untitled." I read your piece and found she is a person who is capable of handling anything that is thrown her way. I think she is flexible no matter the situation. A title suggestion, "Flexibility" ...but it's only a suggestion through what was seen through my eyes!
Ted E
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Gracias Angelito! Sip sip, something along those lines ^^ although I wasn’t originally thinking “pain” when I wrote this… that’d be another way to take it… if you will. This one was meant to be “open” to interpretation (hence it being so short).
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I realy like this. A strong woman that will not break, but bend in the wind like like a tree does. Someone that can roll with the punches and still continue on living, no matter what. And correct me if I'm wrong... but the second stanza is speaking of the pain you have already suffered? I feel that you are trying to express that. That they can't do anything to you that hasn't already been done before. Well... great write. Short and sweet, compacting alot of emotion in such few words.
~Pedro~
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Very nicely done, short, to the point. Very much how I like poems to be. The less words you can use to convey a message, the more meaningful they each become. All the best, KP
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Thank u KP! same 2 u~
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Short, tight, precise; a good deal compressed into six short lines. Nice balance/juxtaposition of imagery implicit in "break" and "crack"--they even sound sufficiently alike to emphasize the contrasts. Good use of parallel structures to enhance meaning.
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Thanx Micol 4 appreciating it! The words actually popped into my head sometime before workout one day at the gym... lol... the times we're inspired
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very good
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Thank u Alla^^
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