I pause…
spellbound
beneath sauvignon skies
as rain begins its march
across the meadow
I call back distant echoes
of moments shared
from hidden alcoves of my soul
an ambient ambrosia
of petal soft touches
fondling their way
from thirsting parted lips
onto tumid rings of color
as a satiated bloom
weeps honeyed nectar
in imminent fulfillment
a rising pinnacle
(...revealing revelations of romance)
is now gently falling
like the vanishing patter of rain
calming
comforting
taking me deep into
soporific slumber
....dancing on fields of claret clouds
to music of the spheres
touching the face of stars
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Author notes
Happy Hundredth Muddy!
In a list
A contest entry
- 100th Contest ....for my Favorites by MuddyKing.
10000 points, ended September 23, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Friends welcome by Riftkin.
500 points, ended June 8, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like your use of sauvigon, ambient and satiated in this piece ... there is a strong yet delicate sensuality that permeates this write ... congratulations on receiving two honorable mention trophies on this finely wrought poem ...
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To hold beauty in our hands ....
this here poem is what one of them
would be, images that shine right off the page
Riftkin
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I've been waiting to comment on this one...first, use the pic on your author's page...that is Mad Moon..and then some
secondly, I have always loved your rich use of language and poetic devices and this entry is filled with both.
Poetry like this is why I keep coming back here.
I knew this was a contender when I first read it and it seems to seep more and more with each read.
exceptional
peace and hugs
Muddy
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this is beautiful.. leaving me to ask
why don't i read you more often?
m
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what use of wonderful words...iamges..almost, but not quite speallign it out for me... and I trace my own meanings, on curl at a time. Beautifully done...
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"I pause…
spellbound
beneath sauvignon skies
as rain begins its march
across the meadow"
Ahhh...excellent penning, Lady of da Moon...Such sweet sensuality dripping upon the page...Richard will love it, my Friend...Great picture, too...Chiaroscuro is such an effective technique, I believe...Wonderfully done...
Wander
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Thanks, Wanders!! You honor me, my friend! So glad you enjoyed this one. I had "fun" with it! Hehehehehehehehe...
Thanks again, dear friend, for the kindness, and the read. Love and laughter to you!!
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forgot your applauses...
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Dearest friend, it is always a trip through the fascinating and variegated realm of dreams when I read your writes...and they always leave me breathless, no matter what it is about. I fell into the soporific slumber with you, trapped in a hazy dream that I had absolutely no intention of escaping from. Inevitably, I did anyway, because I was forced to wake up
You write some of the most magnificent pieces I have seen on this site at any time. This is no exception to the rule.
I want to wish you the best of luck in the contest and let you know I am thinking of you and praying for you in all other aspects of life.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Awwwww....my cheeks is flushing, girl! Thank you so much, Raven, for such a wonderful response to this poem. I am so happy you enjoyed it, dear one. So glad I could offer you a gentle escape....if only for a while. No one deserves it more than you, my Sister!! Again, thanks for your kindness, my dear Raven. I loves ya lots, girlfriend!!
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"Before I sleep I pause".....this started off with the "wow" factor. The rest just dripped down from that line. A very well written and beautiful poem. Very romantic and sensual. I love this. I'm sure Muddy will adore this too.
~Lyrical
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Many many thanks, Lyrical!! So happy you liked this poem. It means a lot to me, as I hold you in highest esteem, my friend. Again, thanks for the kind words and the read. I appreciate it!
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Beautiful imagery... a couple of my favorites were
"sauvignon skies"
and
"fondling their way"
just beautiful
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Many thanks, Cherokee, for the kind respose, and the read. I'm pleased you enjoyed this offering, and appreciate your kindness very much! Love and laughter to you, my good friend.
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outstanding
an outstanding piece of sensual poetry walking in carefully controlled balance the multiple dimensional border between sweet romance, raving lust, subtle eroticism, desires raw and desires fulfilled, body parts all over the place same as the mind trying to gather them together inside the one meaningful expression of your poetry.
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My friend....thank you so very much for the wonderful response to this poem. I am so thrilled you enjoyed it so much, and "saw" all that I tried to put into it....all the subtle nuances... Again, thank you for your kindness, and the read. I so appreciate it!! Love and laughter to you
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beautifully sensuously and lavishly written. although at first i thought the picture might over power my thoughts and interest, in the end your words won out.
nicely done
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Thank you so very much, Steve. I am so thrilled the words won! Hehehehehe... It's good to be writing again, and I'm so pleased you enjoyed this offering. Again, thanks for the read and your kind words, my friend. Love and laughter to you
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Oh, my this is so very beautiful...wow, I've missed your poetry but so glad I had the chance to feast on the images, metaphors and emotions so skillfully pressed here against this page. Silky smooth and subtle sensuality - so very elegant. I so love your voice here - light and airy. Simply beautiful - and what a stunning picture to compliment the poetry!!
~ Nicolette
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Sweet Lady...you honor me, yet again, with your kindness. It thrills me that you ejoyed this so much. I'm finally peering out of the darkness, and writing again. It's wonderful to be back, and to see you gracing my pages again. I have so missed it, and you. Thanks again, my dear Nic, for the kind words and your loving heart.
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Soft and silken verse of descriptions verily trickle down in this piece. Love the soothing voice heard in it.
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Thanks, Suseann. So glad you enjoyed this one. I finally seem to be peering out of the dark, eh? LOL! Again, thanks for the kind words, and the read. I appreciate you, my friend! Love and laughter...
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