I don’t want to let you in
If I had a choice,
I won’t.
I don’t even try to show
That I don’t care
About you
Instead give you hugs
Tell you I care
(A lie)
Maybe I just need some
Attention or care
But-
I am not ready for you
To be committed
I can’t.
And I don’t want to tell
I want us to
Go on.
Am I just being selfish?
Playing with your
Heart?
I do not understand this
Any more than
You do.
Now I look out the window
At the golden sunsets
We loved so much.
So many things have changed
Since I said these words:
"I hate you"
And you cried, while I stared
You gave so much and
I just took.
I am sorry if I played with you,
For breaking your heart
And being selfish
It was all about me- not you
Now I see you with
New friends.
And I wish I still had you
Here by my side
Always.
A contest entry
- Selfishness, Selflessness by Just Paper.
650 points, ended August 14, 2007, 7 entries
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Comments
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It's a good example of what I was looking for in the contest. The simplicity... may have been a little too simple. The use of syllables threw me off a little bit, as well as your use of "*", which I didn't understand. In any case, it was a good read. Very to the point, which is refreshing to a point. I wouldn't be lying if I said that the imagery was... not there.
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Thank you for your comment!
I edited the poem and fixed it a little. Thank you once again
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Oh wow! very nice. the person has two-sided feelings and it adds to the overall effect. bravo! Keep writing and let's see who get's the gold. MUAHAHA. lol! or which ever medal. Don't bet on it though
fantastic poem anyways.
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fantastic poem well done.
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This is really good, I know how the person on the both sides of this poem feels like... Either way it's a wonderful poem... Koodles
Blessed be
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Awww... as u can see from this simple "aww" i dun know what to say once again!!!
Another great job dude... bravo brava!!!
And GOOD LUCK 4 the competition... AAAHHHHH!!!
sorry i just got a bit excited... well ya...
Oh now i know what to say...
Its too painful to have your heart fooled by a fool!!! so dun u dare be one and do those stupid things...
HAVE A NICE DAY!!!
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