Do not weep,
Those tears are mine,
I値l snatch them from your eyes before they fall.
I値l eat your screams before they get the chance,
To reach the ears of sympathetic smiles.
You dare to cut your arms,
I値l stitch you up before you bleed,
And I知 using anesthetic with a kind word or two.
I値l give you something
Not
To cry about,
Just let me keep your pain.
Author notes
Hope this is ok.
A contest entry
- Selfishness, Selflessness by Just Paper.
650 points, ended August 14, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow...this is simplicity in its finest form!!! I love each and every line as each of them evokes heartfelt and uplifting emotions...I'm very much in awed with your poem...and so far this is the sincerest poem I've ever read...congrats...
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This was so simply wonderful to read. I use the word "simply" in both meanings as well. I don't know if this really makes sense in the contest, but I don't think it matters.
The flow... the use of your lines, I enjoyed it all. It flowed very well. I know many people that would play it off as a failure just because they read the words "cut your arms", but for once it worked. This was a great read, and I'd love to read more by you.
"I'll give you something
Not
To cry about,"...
Fantastic. -
This is a wonderful poem... sad and yet also loving... i know many people that I would love to tell this to... and yet not many that would tell me it back...
Owell Koodles..
Blessed be
Mystic
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