Vicious stares through smoky curtains
Ignorance is bliss they say
Orgasms denied (or at least delayed) as the tension builds
Lashes crack and blood arcs
Excited gasps as screams shatter the silence
Naked body forgotten, she knows that her soul is bare
Taken with the violence of one completely owned
Eons pass and she opens her eyes
Red haze obscuring the faces above
Oriental ropework keeps her spread
Totally open to all who want her
Ice cold knife against hot clit
Carrion eater breath in her face
All orifices penetrated as one
A muffled cry as throat is ravaged
Cunt dripping fluids of many types
Inspection of the damage and then filled once more
Three ... six ... nine ... until numbers lose their meaning
Objectified to the extreme, yet still a small spark of self remains
Rage has no place, anger is futile
Everything is about the corporeal and its needs
Trusting the Master of Ceremonies
Needing to give all
Even thought itself is offered up and taken away
Leaving only the bleeding core of her being
Orchids and sandalwood, the murmur of voices
Insulated from the physical, she senses the Master nearby
Volition returns as a tear is wiped away
A contest entry
- Invite only by Master Ktulu.
450 points, ended October 3, 2007, 2 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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WOOOHOOOO! Well done on the gold!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Wow!!
Powerful piece penned and in Acrostic form!!
(not an easy thing to do plus keep the flow)
Bravo!
(ditto what the others said)
Magnificent weaving of words!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
Many blessings to You
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thank you very much for the comment and the praise
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Love It
Good luck in the challenge Captain
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this was really great. at first i didn't even realized that it was an acrostic until i read the comments below. you really took this challenge on. congratulations on the high score, it was well deserved.
shimmer
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Thank you very much for your kind words shimmer
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wow nothing like setting the bar high for the rest of us... well done on achieving what was asked... i had better hurry up with mine now... good luck in the challenge
cheers
Jen
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Thanks for the comment Jen.
Yes, you better get moving!
Tatt
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Wow. Powerful write. Vivid imagery. This was incredible.
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Thanks Arzab, glad you liked it
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A Standing Ovation
Bravo! Sir.....You have pulled this off like none other I have seen. Violent erotica without the need to overdue the violence...definately erotic.
This is absolutely amazing and damn near perfect. I loved the acrostic although the way that it was written one would have a hard time noticing that unless they actually read the left side of the poem itself.
Presentation.....................................20
spelling and punctuation.........................20
originality......................................20
how well you handled the challenge...............20
overall..........................................20
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Total............................................100
**Master Ktulu** -
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Thank you very much for the Gold
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Thank you very much for your kind comments and the 100% score
For some reason I like acrostics, there is the mixture of the constraint of the initial letter of each line, but in a strange way that frees up my mind to do whatever it wants with the rest of the line.
Tatt
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gobsmacked - You have outdone Yourself with this one Master!
The 'violence' that You have portrayed in this acrostic is phenomenal and yet so exceptionally erotic ... ~closing legs tight~
Thank You for sharing this wonderful piece with us - You are truly gifted (in more ways than one )
Forever in Your service,
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Thank you My pet.
you know Me, I am never one to back away from a challenge
Glad you liked it.
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liked it???!!!
i damn well adored it!!!!!!!!!
True, You never back down from a challenge, but i have yet to see You fail at anything You have attempted
Forever Yours,
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