Silent screaming
Cries within
Regret for failure
Regret for sin
Never hear
Never see
Child alone
Left to be
Watching others
Eyes shut tight
Silence around
Through noise I fight
Weary one
Lost from birth
Delusions of strength
Hope of worth
Confusion around
Hiding lies
Receiving everything
Away she flies
Fly away
Start again
Nevermore
One day then
Sleeping soundly
Thrashing night
Both at once
Opposites fight
In a list
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great
so why does one always say "opposites attract"? does that mean that all humans just crave fights? scary concept
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like it.. perfect rythm. Maybe you should capitilize your I's. I especially like: sleeping soundly...
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silent pain of a disturbed mind?, or just a painful life, my perception is a little off this a.m..
However, this is a very thought jolting write.
"confusion around, hiding lies, receiving everything, away she flies. fly away, start again, nevermore, one day then...Beautifully penned.
Sincerely Sassy,
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Sleeping soundly
Thrashing night
Both at once
Opposites fight
what a truth you are touching here..so philosophical and so mystical as well..but yes this is life my friend..a thought provoking piece and making us to ponder about the depth of the issue raised here..well done and the logic is quite powerful....well done...
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excellent
you have nice flow nothing forced the words crafted effortlessly and all wrapped up so cleanly. keep penning
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My impression on this is that you got what you were thinking out and it was easy to understand and i liked the flow of it and the way it sounded.You did a great job and I liked reading it.Your words were chosen really well and the thoght process was easy to follow.
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