I wonder what you would have looked like,
and I question why I care.
A little sister (if even that)
that I never had.
Would you have been the baby?
If so... I won't say I'm glad of the fact
that you didn't make it...
But I am glad of the baby I know,
his smile and winning charms.
Would you have been as lovely?
As annoying and just as sweet?
The one thing that makes me sweat
is the possiblity of not knowing him at all.
I can't miss you , really,
because yours is a face I never viewed...
I cried when you died
because thats what our momma did.
Sometimes, maybe, I've felt you
in her heart, perhaps:
A tiny beating in the air.
A sight of warmth and cinnamon,
just barely sensed.
It's then that I honestly sorrow
for you, the heart
who barely had the chance to live;
(if even that)
The little sister I never had.
Author notes
Sort of a moment/character that has impacted my life, simply through their nonexistance.
(Between my 2 little brothers, my mom had a miscarriage: she named the unborn baby Grace)
--This entry, plus Changing Skirts--
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Comments
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This is a very sad and poignant write, full of the questions natural to such a loss.
Told from the sibling's viewpoint, it has a perfect balance of grief and pragmatism, with the matter-of-fact style ( "I cried... because that's what our momma did ) of the early lines being replaced by a softer, bittersweet feeling "A tiny beating of the air. A sight of warmth and cinnamon...". The last line simple, yet laden with loss.
Great write, best of luck in the contest.
PJ ( Liltandrhyme - Indigo Child/OK Computer )
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aw. this is so sad! I cannot imagine how hard that must've been for your mother, and for your entire family. I like the way that you wrote this - it wasn't over the top, but honest and real. I'm really impressed by this!
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whoa..i didnt know she had a miscarriage. weird. and sad.
im sorry.
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