Was it in the spasm
where memories
were shrouded in black fog?
Last year the roses bloomed
only to wilt in
the spreading darkness
Lotuses and consciousness
merged at a point of
singularity
fading into twilight
In the center of the iris
a single tree blossomed
In the heart of darkness
past the river of fire
between the pain
and the blood
is the tree of wrath
watered with anger and gluttony
Black leaves nurtured
the indescribable concept
of oblivion
Spindly roots dug
into Eden's soul
clawing and grinding to the core
of existence
where not even the seraph's dared dwell
In rolling shadows
blackness seems as tangible as
the chestnut tree we sat under
dreaming of degeneration,
evolution's leading to the tomb
A contest entry
- closes tonight by Melissa Gayle.
300 points, ended August 13, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is such an amazing piece. I love the word usage in it. Definitely deserving of the gold.
Write on.
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I'm not sure what it is about this piece that bothers me so much. I just can't put my finger on it, and that makes me feel terrible, because I hate to remove something and not be able to tell you why. Ah, goddamnit.
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Ironic that the one of, if not the best poet on this site loved this poem and awarded it gold. She has ungodly expectations.
Hon, you just do not understand poetry do you.
Expect me to never enter one of your fucked up contests again. You're just a dried, critical bitch. -
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I guess you're right. I don't know anything about anything. And I'm a dried, critical bitch because I have personal opinions. People just shouldn't be allowed to have those.
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Wow.
This is -amazing-
Seriously blew me away.
The imagery and description is exellent.
I just love the whole thing, especially the lines :
In the center of the iris
a single tree blossomed
Just beautiful.
Well done, and congradulations on the gold you won for this!! You deserved it.
iChewGlitter - x
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