the flash
of sun on silver armor
green cloth on black horse
green standard flapping
in the wind
the smell
of sweaty stallion
of dusty field
of ladies perfume
of food
the sound
leather creaking
crowd roaring
horse snorting
knight yelling
hooves thundering
the impact!
a lance, shattered
splits into pieces
raining down on the crowd
the charger
riderless
trots to where his master
lies still on the ground
the victor
triumphant
salutes the seething masses
chanting his name
the king
awards the champion
his prize:
a golden
medallion
In a list
A contest entry
- Allpoetry Book Project #2! by tinuelena.
800 points, ended June 20, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Ha. I thought of A Knight's Tale, too.
This was very spare. I liked that.
Elizabeth -
We have a Medieval Fair, but they don't have jousting. I had hoped you were going to save the maiden. Oh well. Your imagery puts me right at the scene. Can't get much closer than that. Thanks for your entry.
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Wow you painted a vivid image in my mind with this, I love poetry that you can really feel. Brilliant job. Sorry for taking so long to judge my contest, my internet has been giving me some problems. Good luck
♥
~Lana
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I thought you were going to say something about the Ren Fair! I do like it too but i hate the vulgarness. Neat use of words at beginning of stanzas. Great job kept me captivated
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good poem it means alot to me for some reason... i dont know why but it just does. i like your background too, its awsome! i was just randomly looking through poems and i got yours. anyway, good poem.
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This was an interesting piece. Each stanza deals directly with the first line and is not inhibited by ryhme, form or flow. This was well done and very descriptive. I too love renaissance fairs, and my fiancee has even participated in a few. This was nicely done and really was able to bring the full aspect of seeing a joust. Great work, keep it up and good luck in the contest.
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I love the re-enactments, they let you blend into the past, as well as this write does also, well done.
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In this line 'green cloth on black horse' you have an extra space between 'green' and 'cloth' tho, most don't care about little things like that, I always catch them. Oh well.
This reminded me briefly of a scene from A Knight's Tale.
A nice piece that you have written here.
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I've been wanting to go to one of those for the longest time.... this poem read like a joust....
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