Life...Is long and endless.
What's the point of it all?
No one truly understands.
Life is one big Hell.
No bright light in sight.
Only a fiery pit.
Life's a mother fucking he-she bitch!
So I look for a blade.
To cur through these nightmares.
My sight goes red.
Squirt, squirt, squirt...
I made a mess.
Leak, leak, leak...
Now its all going black.
Drip, drip, drip...
.....................
MUHAHAHA
Life is so unfair!
Think it would be that fucking easy!?!
FUCK NO!
Squirt, squirt, squirt.
AAHHhhhhhhhh...........
Life is so unfair!!
Leak, leak, leak.
Life's drifting away....
Drip, drip, drip.
______________________
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Author notes
Yh... I was bored one day at school... This is how I feel
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Comments
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This takled an interesting subject, and I did like some lines
Others were cliche
I didn't like the swaering, but it did highlight the emotions
I liked the kind of flurry of emotions and onamatapia relating to the emotions
Well done
Good luck
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Vivid imagery and honesty in your feelings. Thanks for the entry and best of luck in the contest!
Love~
Az
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Great!
I really like it. As an excutter I can relate to it very well. You did make one mistake though. On line 8 you mis spelled cut. Thanks for the read it was wonderful! -
Not Alone
well, you're not the only one, hell, everyone feels that way sometimes, at least I have...but you know what? with time you learn not to care...like in that old song: 'call it karma, call it luck, me - I just don't give a ----, Bounce, bounce, nothin's gonna keep me down...'
FUCK ALL
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