I felt the warmth, the treachery
Burning down your lips
It heated the core of my body
Moving so slowly, in and out
A forked tongue on the edge of my life
Your nails dug in so hard
Parting my skin,
And leaving a faint moan on my breath
My whole life was reflected in your steady movement
The pulsing of our souls beating together
So hard and violent
My perfect arch, left you more room
Exploration was the key, and
You took me as far as you could
My fingers ran through your hair
As your teeth nibbled on the center of all desire
My body trembled and would not cease
I lay perplexed by your hunger
As you rose on your knees ready for one more go
I was breathless, but needy
And you took advantage of my urge
I wanted and needed that which I could not have
And at the peak of my orgasm
I knew it was wrong
I grabbed my razor, and holding it to my stomach
I ripped the very essence of life out of me
But your mouth claimed it, suckling on my misery
Oh it was sheer perfection
I cried, and rocked
The epitome of pleasure
My arms feel weak
Along my body, and you did all the work
Your hands claimed my back, moving me on you
As your lips caressed my new cuts
You wanted me even more
And I succumb to this too easily
My eyes closed and I felt the wave
Such sweetness leaving my limbs uncontrollable
I pushed against your body
But you kept your thrusts long and hard
Keeping me there when my body wanted it to end
And it was here, in this bed
I forged the boundaries
And I found my body numb
And cradled in your arms
I remained so still, and darkness caved in
I smiled so serene
Author notes
I hope this is what you wanted for your contest!!!! I know I had alot of fun writing it!!!!!
Ohh and as for whic ones style I used... I tried to keep it like erotic, and roamntic....but I wanted to throw a little of the dark aspect with the wording, and the secrecy...so I tried to incorporate a little of both!!!!!!!!!
solo!!!!!!!!
A contest entry
- Dark Romance- A true challenge by Menace.
1200 points, ended August 19, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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holy dolly thats got the lot. a hot and sesual nuber phew just going outside to cool down . stunning
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I pushed against your body
But you kept your thrusts long and hard
Keeping me there when my body wanted it to end
And it was here, in this bed
I forged the boundaries
And I found my body numb
And cradled in your arms
I remained so still, and darkness caved in
I smiled so serene
oh this has me heading to take a cold shower -
This is a very well written work of erotica with an edge to it. I feel a little funny giving kudos for erotica to one so young but your work seems very mature, and It made me read it. Really, it flowed so well and swiftly that before I knew it I was done. An excellent poem my friend. Congrats on winning the Bronze. You surly earned it.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH BABY!
That's all I've gotta say, poetic, erotic, to some, neurotic...But hardly. Justtt great, I loveeee it.
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Question?
I will need to know if this is a collaboration to qualify for a chance at gold. Do not reply. Just place solo or collaboration in your author notes. Thank you. -
awesome awesome and so awesome
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Delicious
This was both tender and dark. I loved it. I guess you took Sedie's advice b/c I did not notice any errors right off. I would have liked to see stansas but that's a personal choice. Good Luck!
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super dark
This was a very descriptive read. Very descriptive. I enjoyed it. I would like for you to indicate who's style you used and where. Also, before Corrupt sees it, check your spelling of certain words. I liked this. Thanks for entering!
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