Its late and im home alone.
The popcorn bowl is empty and
the polterguist has gone off.
I wasnt up for scary movies but
everyone else was. I rolled my eyes
as the fake blood was splashed and the
fake screams made it worse. I walked
my way down stairs muttering.
Out of the corner of my eye i saw a movement
but it was impossible. I was down there alone.
Brushing it off i went back to the room and no one
was there. I shouted "You guys it isnt funny" No
one called back. I turned the T.V on and it shut off
on its own. Things started to float and spin. Shallow
voices grew stronger and more violent. Suddenly I was
knocked to the ground. Dazed, i saw blurred images something
moved towards me with a shaky hand. It reached up
and grabbed me by the neck and threw me against the wall.
It scratched and pulled at me. The figure dragged my down
the stairs, hitting my head on each step.
Was this some dream gone wrong?
A contest entry
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300 points, ended September 20, 2007, 37 entries
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Comments
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I like the storytelling style used here, tho I think a couple of line breaks may have strenghthened this.
As the story progressed, the reader is drawn more and more into it ( much as the 'scary movie' had drawn in the character in the poem ).
Just as the action peaks... the story is pulled like a rug from under our legs, and we are left with only a serious of questions. Brilliant!
Best of luck in the contest
PJ ( Liltandrhyme - Indigo Child/OK Computer )
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The flow is great here where I got confused.
The figure dragged my down
(The figure dragged me down)
the stairs, hitting my head on each step.
Was this some dream gone wrong?
Did you mean me or my. I may have misunderstood the use so if I did. Could you please explain it to me. It a great write. I do not watch horror movies if I do it during the day time.My mind works only to well on it own. Thanks for your wonderful comments. Have a great day. -
ooh...... me likey!!!!! well that is the last time i will ever dis a scary movie..... ps when i go down stairs i sing the jeepers creepers song!!! it makes me feel safer for some reason!!!!!!!!!!!! But after this....whoa i best stay with the crowd....do you think those stairs gave her a headache....just wondering????
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