Day after day, the sun falls into the horizon,
grazes the water, sends sparkling ripples
running towards me to the shore.
My two hands reach into the sea
and hold it, hold
the life it sustains
but cannot sustain the life it holds.
Generous embraces and comforting words barely reach me, instead,
they cling to my hair like the ribbons I always wanted
for Christmas as a child.
These foreign winds carry parts of me away
like dandelion seeds drifting from their slender stem
into new beginnings
and old ends…
I feel like I’m a mask moving across a black stage,
deliberately uncertain, seemingly unseen,
as I reach into the grassy meadows,
into the warm soil, and as my fingers get entangled in the roots
I want just one thing:
to open up that dusty book,
take that dewy pen,
to write poetry,
and to pray.
And to pray.
In a list
A contest entry
- who you are is who you are when you're alone- by CarCrashHumor.
600 points, ended September 21, 2007, 43 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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So beautiful this write is
I truly loved this for within your fingertips as they gently reach from the mind has painted the loveliest picture for me as I read . Great work here
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yes; I'm recommenting...
this is such a dreamy write-- and I can hear the thoughts come at me across the water. I know the scene you're describing. -
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Thank you for the trophy and wonderful comment!
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Wow
Wow, this is so rich and mature, it reminds me of the many famouse English poets I have read. For one so young you have wonderful romantic side to your character.
Great stuff, this is what I enjoy reading.
Terry
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Thanks Terry! Poetry does indeed bring out one's character... it's such a great outlet, and so rewarding when I get comments like yours!
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beautiful.
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not bad at all
it works from the flow standpoint and the images are amazing but all in all it doesnt tell me about you just what you want -
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Okay, fair enough! Thanks for taking the time to comment.
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I am enjoying your style of writing very much.I could picture the ocean and beach as i read this.Good job.
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very nice
this poem-prayer was excellent. I enjoyed your work a lot and thanks for your visit to my work as well, The Shaker
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Poem-prayer -- I like that! Thanks for your comment and applause.
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Hi!
This is really focused, surefooted, and has that expectant opus that we need as believers.
I love the form and content.
It's a compelling write for the spirit to lead us.
Thank you. Wonderful piece!!!!!!!!!! LD -
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I love how everyone finds a different, personal meaning from reading poetry... thanks for sharing yours! Comments like yours help me grow.
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Wow. The imagery in this poem was absolutely amazing. That is one of the things that I think can make or break a poem - the imagery. You did an excellent job.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Thank you so much for your support! Imagery is my favourite thing about poetry... I have really gotten into photography and art lately, so it's a fun challenge for me to relate those images into words.
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Wow such emotion and wonderful imagery throughout. Excellent prayer. Just amazing
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Thank you Tawk!
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Perfect Imagery
I felt it and tasted it and smelled it and became it.
I love the end so much that I felt I needed to pray with you!! I really like to take trips when I read poems, and what a ride this was indeed.
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts! It was great to have you as a passenger!
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