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Flower Of The Thorns

It Blooms
In places it ought not,
This Rose.

Let not thorns of blood pierce
And taint such purity
When out of hatred and scorn
It has risen still.
Have we not been torn enough,
By such secrecy,
To have merited some kind of acceptance here?
Is it backwards?
A flower birthed of thorns.
I beg you,
Those of such high moral standing,
Detach me not from my love,
For it is an unforgivable crime
To tear the petals from a Rose

 


Even if born of Blood Thorns .

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  • Diatribes
    January 14, 2008

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    This must be about the harsh feelings that accompany love.
    The ones that seem to out number the good ones, just as the thorns on the lengthy vines out number the soft petals of he small flower.
    Your vocabulary is not very big, but you get out a dictionarys' worth of meaning (and feel) in your little everyday words.


  • Riftkin gold member
    September 11, 2007

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    I beg you,
    Those of such high morals,
    Detach me not from my love,
    For it is an unforgivable crime
    To tear the petals from a Rose


    it is best to be there for a friend
    then try and get them to see
    things your way
    even if it hurts


  • ElderSmoke
    September 1, 2007
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    Spectacular write. interesting the wording though and very thoughtfull and deep emotioned.


  • altatok
    August 25, 2007

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    This is amazing writing. I think I get what it means, but I know I'm probably wrong and only thinking in terms of my life and what I know, so I won't try to write my interpretation. At any rate, I love this piece.

  • grm
    August 21, 2007

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    this is over my head...but for some reason, i like it.
    i am tempted to put my own interpretation to your metaphors, but knowing i will inevitably be wrong, will abstain.

    thanks so much for entering


    • Diablos Secret
      August 22, 2007
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      lol no no give it ago, everybody else has And if you like, I could give you the answer afterwards .

  • atty-poet
    August 13, 2007

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    I get this, the forbidden or illicit relationship, I even empathize with it right now. But I'm a little distracted by the unnecessary or mysterious use of capital letters, and the ellipsis points, which weaken a line break. I even think you could drop the last line, and it still works. Might be more sympathetic if the nature of the forbidden was suggested. Readers might be turned off if it's criminal, as well as socially/morally forbidden. Just food for thought.


  • Happy Emo in Love
    August 13, 2007
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    wow... very moving... I loved it....


  • indomitable
    August 13, 2007
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    i do. wheresoever you go, go with all your heart. i try to remember that.

  • Rowan gold member
    August 13, 2007

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    I have to agree with Shakes-spear..
    it strikes me as a love poem, but not the average love
    relationship; something forbidden about it. I agree that the language used is older
    in context, but it works here. Interesting work, and intriguing.


  • Gone
    August 13, 2007

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    yep... I have lusted over an underage girl before too!

    oops...

    I liked the subtlety of this write, whilst it still clung to the raw emotion that it needed...

    Good!


  • petitemaverick
    August 13, 2007
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    Intriguing

    I really admire your style. Yu maintain intrigue and mystery throughout. This is not the type of poem that is loaded with emotion but clever and subtle. Your language sounds 'royal' and old-fashioned, which I really like. Perfect beginning and ending.


  • Billythekid
    August 12, 2007

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    "It blooms...In places it ought not"
    Sounds like a secret relationship that has been found out and now is being torn apart. I can feel pain and regret in your words.Great write.


  • mandi3939
    August 12, 2007

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    Very interesting. It works on so many levels, I think I could read this when I'm in different moods and get something new each time.


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    Great

    I can see there is more than what is said. To me I feel your trying to be accepted and yet poeple are the biggest thorn in the rose. Great write


  • Shakes-spear
    August 12, 2007

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    Very Nice

    This could be intended for so many things. The best thing a poem can do is to be matched with many situations and have an answer for them all. Your meaning could be different than mine, yet your poem touches me in it's own way. Do I understand what this means to you...I don't know, but I do know what it said to me. Thanks, The Shaker

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