Rises above,
Rules the world,
Conquers all,
Yet I'm "just a girl"
I'll take life by the hand,
And run on my own,
I'll set the bar higher,
Than you'll ever know.
Don't step in my path,
I'm in top gear,
I'll run your ass down,
And show no fear.
Take your last sip,
While I chug the last bottle,
You've never known a girl,
This crazy and wild,
Underestimate me,
I'll prove you wrong,
I'll take you down,
Because I am strong.
Call me what you want,
A bitch, a whore, a slut,
I show you you're mistaken,
So keep your mouth shut.
Intriguing and beautiful,
Independent, I'm free.
I do what I want,
To live happily.
But things break me down,
And tear away the surface.
Don't look at me with pity,
Or my ass you will kiss.
Fake azz girls,
With more money than brains,
That's one thing in this world,
That could drive me insane.
"Like totally oh-my-god!
Could I be any blonder?
Like I walked to the store,
And I forgot what I gone for"
Put a sock in it,
Or I'll play marbles,
With you're teeth,
Maybe next time,
You'll think before you speak.
Why can't girls,
Be a little more like me,
Have a little self confidence,
And live life carefree.
A contest entry
- Cool, Independent, Badass Women by So Strange.
900 points, ended September 17, 2007, 41 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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wow congrats on the silver. sounds like this girl would just kick the worlds ass
very well done 
be well and be blessed
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Well, except for the diss against blondes, I thoroughly liked the poem, because like the below poster said, it has ATTITUDE.
I thougt it also had nice flow and it was written well. The reason I hate the diss against blondes is for two things: first of all, I AM A BLONDE, and second of all, I know a lot of other blondes that are like me and are intelligent. In other words, all blondes aren't stupid. Actually, if you look a bit closer, you can tell that more blondes are actually smart than stupid.
Nice job and good luck in my contest! -
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just so u know i have no problem with blonds its just what I thought a "valley girl/popular/typical" type person would say I have those lines in quotations lol anyways sry bout the blond comment I didn't mean it to offend anyone! And trust me I know lots of blonds that are brilliant, I know they're not stupid!
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Attitude
This poem has plenty of attitude, sassy and strong, just the way I like it! Line #40 may need some tinkering, maybe "And forgot what I'd gone for" or "And I forgot what I went for", IMHO. Everything else is just about perfect, especially playing marbles with someone's teeth. Best wishes in the comp.
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