Bad news ain't nothing when you've got me around. I turn {gore} into [GLAMOUR], baby && I know you f e e d on it. Pretty as a -picture- yet solid as thin i.c.e you are the thing that drives me. You are the one thing I could NEVER get right. I'm a [fake] but I take pills just to make everything a little more real. If I could I'd drown (myself) in the sorrow I created for you, I would feel c o m p l e t e. I fell in love with the [whites] of your eyes (they spun around the blue so well). The teather that holds us together is becoming frayed and I don't want you to run away again. Go ahead and pull the [t r i g g e r], open the [g a t e] underneath me, fasten the [n o o s e] around my neck, I'll keep coming back for more. You're just the kind of p.u.n.i.s.h.m.e.n.t. I was looking for.
A contest entry
- x♥xStarlessx♥x by Dead Star--x.
475 points, ended August 26, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - .the. !D/I/R/T/Y! {*pretty*} by littleBritain.
800 points, ended February 29, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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not bad at all! at first i felt like the the lines should have been clearly segmented rather than being written like prose... but by then end i liked it that way
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wow.
aaamazing - truly.
i loooove itt!
BRAVO
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youre just the kind of punishment i was looking for
oooooo-i luv that line!
i really love what youve done with the quote actually-its awesome
welcome to the finalists good luck
CureMyTragedy♥
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