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autumn leaves


crispy golden leaves
unable to keep their grip
dance along the ground


exuberant leaves
dance and swirl and pirouette
alive beneath the trees


egged on by the wind
hoards of cocky leaves depart
laughing as they go


leaves high in the sky
like yellow spring butterflies
sunlit from behind


freed from their moorings
leaves adrift as scheduled
can never go home




Author notes

Observations from one autumn day in the mountains when the fallen leaves were very active- and noisy.

written as haiku before I learned more about the form-

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  • Tamera
    August 22, 2007

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    I love the form and the strong metaphors here: dancing, cocky and scheduled. You are very strong on creating visual imagery for you reader.


  • heygoo
    August 14, 2007

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    I'll be the first to tell you I know nothing of form. I enjoyed this piece wholeheartedly anyway. Autumn is my favorite season and you have captured it here quite nicely. I just love those crispy, dancing leaves.