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Betting on Myself

 

I see myself in shades of blue
a little shy, and yet I fly
toward a vision I know is true
where endurance breeds self assurance

There’s nothing that can stop my quest
To find my strength, I’ll go all lengths
It’s what makes me the very best
at what I do, for me…for you

Confidence to call a spade a spade
my power in beauty, combined with duty
Like any man, I am self made
and can achieve, all I believe



                     A faulty veil of guiltless fraud
                     Concealed disguise, promoting lies
                     Yet all enthralled, sit back applaud
                     Spellbound, seduced, all sense reduced

                     You think that you'll win the next game
                     So celebrate your unreached fate
                     With drinks to enjoy all you claim
                     Drunk with distaste of distilled waste

                     False certainty is not that wise
                     Wreck overtakes all your mistakes
                     Addict until you realize
                     When you enthuse, you always lose

Author notes

Task: You and your partner are going to pen a poem that is 24 lines long, inspired by a picture. The first twelve lines will be written by one partner, based on one side or view of the picture and the last 12 lines will be written by the other partner, based of their side or view of the picture. Here is the link; Click here for picture

By: Never Fall in Love & trista
[ first half is hers...]
[ second half is mines ]


Interpretation pf picture.
- The card on a whole was used for the idea of gambling. In some ways .. having a 10 and only 3 spades showed that you think you have more, when really you are losing.
- Numerology of 10: symbolises the "Wheel of Fortune", faith, self-confidence and rise and fall.
- The two shades of the card helped us to incorporate the rise and fall [advantages and disadvantages]

We incorporated all that in our poem. Don't believe me? Read it again.

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  • DarkRomantic113
    April 16, 2008
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    This was great. Loved the author's note, too. Heh.


  • Florida Sunshine
    March 16, 2008

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    Reading just the piece for what it is ~ I think you did an excellent job!  However, just a helpful hint or slight correction ~ 4th Stanza 3rd line applaud < spelt like that ~ :) ~ No worries I've done it myself ~ but you might want to do a quick fix ~

    I liked the piece from the start when I got to the authors notes you put the icing on a most Delicious cake ~ You and trista did a terrific job ~ I love all the stuff you put into the piece ~ actually I made many of the connections before even getting to the Author's Notes ~

     

    Very happy to read your work ~ Thanks for entering the "it takes two" contest ~ *star* *star*


  • Edna Sweetlove
    January 10, 2008
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    Two authors for the price of one.

  • Judith Chandler
    January 7, 2008

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    It sounds a bit like a poetic resume! Interesting write. There's parts of the puzzle I can't really figure out because I don't gamble or play cards very often. Different though.


  • Uckerhead
    December 21, 2007
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    nice spin

    To write something complex from something very basic. Well done.


  • Ryno
    November 5, 2007

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    I especially enjoyed the title of this, very creative and captured my attention immediatly. Excellent job in portraying this topic in this light. I especially thought you did a very dinstinct job on penning the two different side. Great job


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 19, 2007
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    Most interesting write


  • Crook Oneil
    October 15, 2007
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    well written, full of metaphor and meaning. i enjoyed it.

  • broken floorboards
    October 8, 2007

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    i think you did well according to the pictures you were given as they arnt exactly awe inspiring. and thru my own experience of these pesky tasks and challenges they can often inhibit your natural style as your having to write what they demand rather than what you feel. and i think this poem struggles because of that as the overall vision remains unclear. but good write.


  • kooleyes
    August 12, 2007

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    Amazing

    Well you both did an awesome job at writing this poem.
    I see myself in shades of blue
    a little shy, and yet I fly
    toward a vision I know is true
    where endurance breeds self assurance
    These lines here just blow me away. The flow and ryhme is outstanding. Very well done ladies.


  • MissyAnn
    August 12, 2007

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    From a 10 of spades?!? geez that is amazing! Your really good at pulling something out of nothing.
    --Missy


  • Dark Whispers
    August 12, 2007

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    I can't believe that you got all that from a 10 of spades, and wrote an amazing poem like that on it, great write
    ~dark


  • Death of the Author
    August 12, 2007

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    That is so f*ckin awesome, great interpretations, I love both halves of the poem, so many great lines in this. Great job xx take care xx


  • Griswold gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    Very well written you two, this is a wonderful piece of work incorporating all that into your poem. best of luck to you...Scott


  • Amera gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    This is great! I love everything about it, the flow, the structure and the image. Let's go to the casino!

    Love,
    Amera &hearts


    • Never Fall in Love
      August 12, 2007
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      haha. No, my dear sister ... the casino isn't a good place to go...
      Can you sneak me in?
      lol

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