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Planting Friendship

 

i.
Our garden was a fusion
of natural colors, mixed and merged.
Mosaic petals formed
patterns of concord
in a mismatched world.

The white rose in the middle
was our tapestry of friendship,
dependant on the stalks of trust
to keep it strong.

But buds do not bloom easily
without a gentle touch.
Patience, care, and understanding
are much needed for the blossom
to open up.

Time too, is essential
for this rose to survive and thrive
With effort and a struggle
always reaching for the sky
remembering success comes not
without sweat and toil
But even that progress
is fragile at its peak


ii.
Delicate petals of persistence
were unfolded with precision
never knowing, never fearing
the pounding of the rain
that landed the first bruise.

With one wound came many
completely destroying all
external beauty
until it finally reached the core
foundation of all that exists

Discarded,
our rose was ripped bare leaving
all but sharp thorns that would
only brew displeasure
[the opposite of primal impression]
in limited days to come.

Broken down and trampled,
I watched a bouquet of wreckage,
as petals floated to the ground,
shed of the burden.

Now the rose’s sweet scent
disappears as petals wilt and rot
No seed remains to plant again

It's existence vanishes
into complete nothingness
leaving no trace of
return.

Dead things
aren't restored.
Only replaced as it is
never revived.

All that blooms will die;
sooner or later.

Author notes

Task: In Flora, you will use any species of flower as a metaphor for an issue in life we must overcome.

by: Never Fall in Love && trista

Flower chosen: White Rose, since it symbolizes friendship. The poem is a metaphor showing how friendship is formed and how it dies - never to come back. 'Blooms and Dies'

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  • DarkRomantic113
    April 16, 2008
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    Very visual write. Loved the metaphor.


  • Griswold silver member
    October 21, 2007

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    Very well written for this unusual contest, A great write indeed to garner the trophy in it as well, very well done, an excellent collaboration. Bless you in all you do...Scott


  • Nam
    October 21, 2007

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    "Patience, care and understanding" - I believe there'd be a comma after "care".

    I do not feel the last two lines are needed. Other than that: a great poem that you have written here.


  • onesugar gold member
    August 12, 2007
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    Beautifully written
    Nice metaphor.
    ~onesugar~


  • kooleyes
    August 12, 2007

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    I like this alot. your choice of the white roses is terriffic.
    The white rose in the middle
    was our tapestry of friendship,
    dependant on the stalks of trust
    to keep it strong.
    This is beautifully written. Thanks for the read and keep on writing


    • Never Fall in Love
      August 12, 2007
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      Thank you for taking time to comment on our poems ... and I'm really glad you liked it. You've chosen great lines, though I can't take credit for them - they belong to trista


  • MissyAnn
    August 12, 2007
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    Very nice. I like your word usage and the flow. Nice metaphor; just not sure i agree.

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