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Yesterday's Memories

Mind in constant rewind, searching for answers,
while day's weight lingers unwanted
Doors opening welcomes me with a sigh,
as lavender water invites a soothing break from reality

The towel whipped teasingly in play...
lay lifeless in yesterday's memories~
Pulled into mental exhaustion by self,
rest promises tomorrow's clarity

Feather pillows embrace the weary
but this comes with a hefty price as
his scent lingers...stalking senses
torturing remaining rationality

Tears fall where kisses once daily laid
and the darkness of the night released again
on a heavy heart feeling the loss...

of unattainable love~

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  • glenn shannon silver member
    April 16

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    A great love filled with passion and all the trust is a rare find , but not unattainable it awaits around the blind corner of time with miss destiny. It shall return when you allow it . moving piece , you are a fine artist love your work.


  • Broken-Rickie
    April 14
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    Beautifully written with sadness. nicely written. Congrats on the Silver!


  • individuality gold member
    April 10

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    ah a sad sigh flipping the heart here, dreams of love washes away as time colelcts the memories, a good poem.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    April 3

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    "Tears fall where kisses once daily laid
    and the darkness of the night released again
    on a heavy heart feeling the loss...

    of unattainable love~"

    Wow, what an ending, really well written and the emotion conveyed elicited a sigh.

    mj. 


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    July 26, 2008

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    Congratulations on the Silver!!!

    I'n not sure how I missed this beautifully heartfelt, yet very melancholy poem. Wishing all the best for you & yours, and I do hope to read more of your newer poems soon!!! Take care, Peace, Cyn


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    Beautifully sad,
    I use to know this feeling, as heartbreaking as it was.
    You wrote an outstanding piece of poetry here.
    As always I enjoyed very much.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • Nicolette gold member
    September 7, 2007
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    "Mind in constant rewind, searching for answers"

    That line personifies memories to me...the questions...over and over. Loved the way you wrote it, Tia. A lovely and moving poem - no wonder there's a trophy attached to it!

    I haven't seen you around here lately...hope you are OK, my friend

    ~ Nicolette


  • RedFox
    August 24, 2007

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    A Beautiful and emotional write that tells the story of a lost love Thanks for sharing tia, 5 stars

    ~Redfox

  • Liquid memories
    August 22, 2007

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    yes, yes

    that fragrance of another one that has gone, and the scent remains, to touch you, reminding you of lost love, teases and tickles at the same time. Touching you with hunger and sadness, reliving memories that will remain. Thanks for sharing. ;f;f


  • Roseleaf
    August 22, 2007

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    delghtfully yet sad

    very enjoyable read and well deserve of gold trophy for such a touching unattainable love story

    Love pauline


  • Maddogk
    August 21, 2007

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    WOW. Your poem is fantastic... You have weaved a beautiful array of words into a deep emotion filled write...

    I found the font to be hard on the eyes though... [Maybe I'm just getting old!!.. lol]
    Still very enjoyable..

    Jeffro


  • Summer Dawn
    August 21, 2007

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    you have developed into quite the awesome poet deary. truly one to master whatever it is she is doing, aren't ya. awesome poem!!


  • aslanlight
    August 20, 2007

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    The emotion is tangible. I can taste it, sense it, feel it, wow you have a gift of reaching out and pulling the reader into your mind's eye!
    I can't really explain how powerful this is.

    Peace Georgia


  • buttheadsloon
    August 20, 2007
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    Superb!

    The comments reflect my own. Hope you can hear the applause!


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    August 19, 2007

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    I'm glad this received a trophy, it is an amazing write. Your ability to strike emotional chords within the reader is very evident with this piece and all the positive comments you've received here. Those little memories cast large shadows sometimes. A thoroughly enjoyable read. Very well done!
    Rory


  • Whoochi gold member
    August 17, 2007

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    AWWW, My beautiful Tia...this made me get all misty for I know what its like to be stuck, even though we want to move on so bad, we have to fight those dam ghosts of forgotten days sometimes...this is absolutely heartfelt as you do with all your poems...this goes in the book too.... Love ya tons Girlie!


  • Desire gold member
    August 16, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Oh Girly You certainly brought forth a Gem!!
    Congratulations on Your Trophy win
    Magnificently penned which tugs at the heartstrings
    also the Spirit
    Loved this!!
    Woooooooooooo hooooooooooooo
    Best wishes to You
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • quakietree
    August 13, 2007

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    Great job! I didn't know it was a quickie until I got to the author's notes.
    My favorite stanza:
    "Feather pillows embrace the weary
    but this comes with a hefty price as
    his scent lingers...stalking senses
    torturing remaining rationality"
    I liked the way you expressed the way scent effects us and memory.
    Congradulations on your nice, shiny trophy- it's perty.
    qt


  • Marctheman
    August 13, 2007

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    well, Tia i love this a lot, it really touch my heart because sometimes that all we left with memories, i just wrote a poem in memory of my father "rare stone is the name" i really feel you in this one.


  • arafura gold member
    August 13, 2007

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    loss...

    Congratulations on a worthy trophy winner Tia! Memories are such powerful companions... There is a lot of emotion on display in this work!
    Excellent!


  • superstition
    August 13, 2007

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    Oh wow, this poem really tugged on the heart-strings, and yes, it's so true. There's also something, oftentimes the little things, that never allow you to forget and make it hard to move on. The dwellers...the past wanders...the ghosts standing in the present while the soul is in yesteryear. A beautiful description of all that. I could see it being played out as a read through this, especially that very last stanza. Absolutely gripping. One of my favorites you've written lately.


  • natchstucco
    August 12, 2007
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    ahhh

    the fluffy stuff. congrats on the shiney as u put it. great emotion,and better script.


  • Jersene gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    Oh, Tia, this is sad, but so beautifully written. The imagery sits heavy, just like the emotion. I loved it! Awesome penning!

  • BigSpiral
    August 12, 2007

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    Not guilty

    I like your attention to procceses and feeling, like rewinding (and no doubt re-playing) thoughts and the weight of a day. Heavy!


  • hoodoolover silver member
    August 12, 2007

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    Aww, very beautiful write, I would imagine we have all had to endure these moments, you capture so well, nice to see you writing, although I do believe you had promised me one, tsk!


  • Night Hope gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    "Feather pillows embrace the weary
    but this comes with a hefty price as
    his scent lingers...stalking senses
    torturing remaining rationality"

    Sighhh...I know this verse too well, Sweetie. Congrats on your silver, Tia. Well done, my Friend. Wanda


  • penman gold member
    August 11, 2007
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    Excellent

    Very well done. Oh my this was fantastic. Congrats on the silver.

  • patterncrow
    August 11, 2007
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    Lovely

    Unattainable love, what can be said to console? Nothing. Profound write.

  • patterncrow
    August 11, 2007
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    got to read agai


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 11, 2007
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    I like this take on my need to hear about lost love.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    August 11, 2007

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    This was so beautiful but so sad. Those memories just come up sometimes and control everything. I loved it..
    My Soulful friend..
    Soulful Woman

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