The coming of the green is
Gradual as
March dissolves like
Greybeard snow in
April-rains’ insistent
Chemistry …. Apparent
Black yields
Subtlety to blood-maroon then
Suddenly, as
Soft as thought, yellow
Half-laments, half-celebrates in
Silhouette against
Still-lead-cased clouds --
But not yet green,
Not yet ....
For all the flashy coyness
Hesitates and
Hovers at the boundary,
Afraid to cross until companion
Drab plumps expectantly to
Bursting, and then too
Waits, satisfied with
Hint and tease .... Only when
Merest slits of something
Not-quite-brown slip
Solemnly to
Joint and tip, limb and branch,
Does wayward green
Reluctantly return, a prodigal,
To test with humble
Touches here and there its
Long-awaited
Welcome home.
Author notes
Options 1 (season) and 14 (prewrite)
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This is a lovely write about seasons. Great imagery and descriptions. Also, very well written. The last stanza was great! Best of luck in my contest and thanks for entering
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great poem. it took some thinking for me to comment on this one. I like how the lines are somewhat broken up, I simply like the feeling I get from that. lovely poem.
thanks for entering.
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Thank you. The poem tried to capture the hesitance of spring, always hinting, then stopping, then starting again until suddenly, almost without our seeing how, it is there.
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I believe your foundation is strong, I think it needs slight tightening and perhaps some breaking into stanzas.
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Thanks for the comment. Tightening is always something I need to watch for. But I think I disagree about the stanzas; the poem is trying to suggest an unbroken if gradual process, so I was working for a kind of single-breath effect. But I'll keep thinking about it.
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