I cry alone
My soul to hold
I can not feel, Its far to cold
The voices in my head
Scream for want of me dead
I cant not try
For all I do is cry
Darkness is where I now dwell
I am slowly fading cant you tell
All alone I say goodnight
I have given up the Fight.
My life has ended that is all.
But now I begin to fall,
Into the depths of hell
My flesh is burning, Why cant you tell?
My stories done for I am dead
Or am I, was this all in my head?
A contest entry
- Pre-Write Mania by Chelsea Void.
600 points, ended October 1, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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you are never alone love...remember that! never ever give up nor foreget i am here for you. I always have been and always will!
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You really wanted to write a rhyming poem and it did not turn out as pretty as it could have if you might have stuck to free verse, at least to begin with. the rhyme was very forced, and to be quite honest, if you're going to write something that's commonly seen, and enter it into a contest, then it has to be pretty spectacular. use of language, imagery, anything to set it apart. you have a lot to work with here and it could be a great poem if you reach inside yourself and strive for some expertise
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nice work great write thanx and good luck
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Jessie. My little girl give me a call. Big sister misses you and you know I will never judge you.
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Hey there.
I am very sorry to inform u that i will have to cancel these contests
due to shortage of time and I am not able to devote time here! I am very sorry!
But since u have already written the poem for the contest..I request u 2 enter
ur poem in this contest which is only for the entries that r there in the two contests!
I am sorry for the inconvenience..Hoping u shall cooperate!
Here is the link...
http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2364848
Please enter the same poem there!
luv
pri
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'tis very good....I'll send you a message w/ more of what I think bout it..and what it means...
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Do not cry, leave the dark, for the light will show you the way. Love, Kindness, Joy, Peace, these are just a few of the things that my pure Light can give you.
Sharra. -
Wipe your tears and emerge from your cocoon...Life welcomes all in it's stride...there are trying times,but there is always day after night...Look around to see the beauty God has gifted us with..the beauty of love for all his creations, the beauty in nature waiting to be tapped...Just watch the gifts ature endows inyou and I gaurentee that a smile shall rest on your lips....
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